Lost Prayer

A prayer,  just one wish

That I had for me, selfish as it may seem.

I prayed to you, sent it to the heavens.

My patience seeming to wear off,

Who do I ask? Why did this happen?

All around me akin to silence.

For that one moment of happiness,

Where do I search?

Don't know how the sands,

kept slipping through my hands.

Can't fathom what other sadness 

lay in front of me.

Life losing it's meaning.

Alone in search of that wish.

that I had sent to heavens.

Must haven't reached high enough

Falling somewhere I know not of.

If you find it, do find me.

And if you do, Would you help me.

To send it above to the creator?

Reviews

[Bowers]

this is wonderful, as though I could have written it myself, a very creative, yet relatable piece, I admire the words you have written, prayers unanswered, life's meaning... we are constantly searching for something more, for answers we may never find... A very thought provoking write!

[New Theory]

Thank you Bowers for taking time to read this :) and sharing your thoughts with me :)

[Bowers]

you are welcome!

[Miles W.]

Very beautiful poem sir! Once again you show off your words in stunning and beautiful fashion.

[New Theory]

Thank you Miles :), you are too kind :)

[Devesh]

This is a great piece of writing, something that resonates with me on a lot of levels. One suggestion: change 'loosing' to 'losing', the words have quite different meanings. Fantastic effort,all in all! :)

[New Theory]

Thanks Devesh for pointing that out. I changed it :).

[Devesh]

You're welcome :)

[Sami Khalil]

"Alone in search of that wish.

that I had sent to heavens.

Must haven't reached high enough"

[New Theory]

Thanks for reading the poem, means a lot to me :)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)..................

[Tai Ryens]

Sounds akin to the thoughts I harbored during my deconversion, interesting. I liked the way you presented this, as doubts yet pleading for somebody to lift up your words to a deity just to know for certain someone was listening. Well done.

[New Theory]

Your reviews and interpretation are awesome . Thanks for the review :)

[Amal N]

Love it! So beautifully written and yes, I can relate to it and I am sure so many people do :)

[New Theory]

Thank you for the review, Really appreciate it, and may your wishes come true :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wonderfully written, provocativelly searching. Bravo..................

[New Theory]

Thank you Sami Khalil :).

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..................

[Angel M]

I love how you put this in words. So beautifully written.

[New Theory]

Thank you Manuel :) .

[Bluefire]

It reminds me of a line in my favorite song.
"Thousands of prayers return to the earth
But I will keep praying."
~*~
This speaks of disappointment and wonder.
Wishing and hoping only to find it not to happen.
Well played. ^^

[New Theory]

Thank you for reading :) . Yes most wishes do not come true but sometimes they may. Just takes longer than usual and not in the way we hoped it would be.
Have a great day.

[Bluefire]

You're welcome, and good day to you. ^^

[icelandicblue]

I like the thought of a bureaucracy in heaven. All those prayers, does someone categorize them and perhaps triage them before kicking them upstairs. Sometimes the wait for an answer is eternal.

[New Theory]

A nice idea to give some thought about, an idea for a story of angels working in the heaven's office.
Wow, thanks for the review :) really grateful to you for taking some time off to read this.
Cheers :)