Lucifer's Flower

Going too far

Crimson lotus on a mountain it waits

Blossoms only once when it rains 

The boa constricts around the base

Choking the peak to a dreamless state.

It slithers with the music of silent whispers.

All the way up to the freezing peak

Lucifer's flower in all its splendor

Stands there with unabashed grandeur

Enticing this scaly creature 

Its parted tongue salivates

It guides and it follows

Touching, encircling slowly 

Drops of venom burn the ground

Melting the solid blue ice

Revealing the beautiful lies

The snake falls down in ecstasy

Content with the life he couldn't save 

On top of the rotten corpse

Of his brother's grave.

Crimson lotus on a mountain it waits.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"Lucifer's flower in all its splendor
Stands there with unabashed grandeur"
Very good use of words. The above lines stood out. The poem made me desire to know more. Your statements were solid and create vision and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[New Theory]

Thank you C. P. :)

[Kringefest]

Wow, excellent depictions and descriptions. I liked the poem as a whole. Very well penned.

[New Theory]

Thank you :)

[Joe_VILOT_]

wow indeed!
A deadly flower deadly fate and a deadly fate for which we who read only know
Lucifers flower maybe.......

[New Theory]

Thanks Joe :)

[Shaquana Adams]

I love your use of metaphor. Very clever and well executed!
-QuanaWana

[New Theory]

Thank you Shaquana :)

[Tai Ryens]

Crimson lotus, I do believe you use that as a metaphor that indirectly connects with the snake mentioned just a few lines after the first. The flower blossoms only once, then constricts the very ground from whence it grows, like a weed strangling the original inhabitants of a lively garden. Sounds akin to an abusive relationship. The snake, unsatisfied with what it has already stolen from its host, soon takes more than the host can handle and kills the host, yet longing for the host again because of what the host has given.

Your use of metaphor makes this extravagant, really, Theory, well done.

[New Theory]

Readers like you make it worth writing, you really put effort on reading the poem and your reviews are always spot on, you say exactly what it was meant without any sugar coating. I like your reviews :)

[Tai Ryens]

I derive just as much pleasure from interpretation than the author does in writing, aha, writing (most particularly, journaling) intrigues me so, I suppose.

[Frieda P]

Your title drew me in, and it just got better from there, excellent, enjoyed!

[New Theory]

Thank you Frieda.... :) you have a beautiful name. :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks, was my pleasure Theory. :)

[TheSearcher]

Wow just wow that is deep. It reminded me of what happen to my last cute pet. Well at least she's in heaven now.

[New Theory]

Yes she is in heaven my dear under gods protection :)

[Lyn Anderson]

What a beautiful verse. A reminder -- take out the apostrophe in it's -- when it is possessive use its. I also would consider a darker crimson/burgundy font.

[New Theory]

Thank you Good sire, I am on it but I have been struggling with finding the right color and now just settled with this color. I am color confused a lot.

[New Theory]

Is this better?

[Lyn Anderson]

This is gorgeous, and I would be a madame, or mademoiselle, or lady...

[New Theory]

Ooops.... I am so sorry madame :), Albeit thanks for the suggestion :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Well, how could you know unless you read me? HINT hint.

[Miles W.]

Your writing always gets the reader entranced in the world you are creating. This is no different. Well done sir.

[New Theory]

Thank you Miles, I try to always,.... thanks to you for accepting my point of view and seeing this and coming into the universe I create.