Waiting

Waiting for someone, who may never come back but still you hope.

So what if it is a day,

it is still darkness behind the charcoal clouds

Slowly dispersing, offering a false ray of hope

Marred by the wind gushing in faster, stronger

bringing with it another thunderstorm

More clouds, more darkness, more sadness

It is a cold, wet day

It drizzles and gushes for hours

Until the last drops get their chance

To kiss the love drenched earth alas

The sky has cleared, blue visibile. 

Sun however is behind the distant hill.

Maybe I will have to wait through the night.

Another long unsure wait, hoping for its sight.

Author's Note

Is it always this hard to move on?

Reviews

[Maglia Weaver Twill]

no. you are a peach. New Theory, what is new theory? What is new theory about? You play with the elements, the rain, the sun, the umbrellas, and master the great science of waiting, how, clansman/clanswoman, we are breathless, weightless, and our earth signs hover about in the atmosphere with the struggling mother earth

[New Theory]

I am really flattered by your comments :) . Thanks for reading these :)

[Stefanie Holmes]

I really liked how you used nature to describe the hardship of moving on. The rains may come, but the sun will always rise again. Well done with this piece!

~Stefanie

[New Theory]

Thank you Stefanie :)

[deepika]

the conflicts of a depressed person have very beautifully taken the shape of a poem. Brilliant..

[New Theory]

Thank you Deepika :). I guess the poem made it seem so but I am not depressed, yes it is the poem of a heart broken person, but a happy one :)

[Stevo The POE-t]

The clouds always seem to be brighter than they really are... Which meaning our minds like to play tricks on us... Making us think we are over it when actually were not

[New Theory]

Mind is a confusing place. It cannot make up its own mind :P

[Taylor_McCutcheon]

You have a great understand of words :) I loved this poem and its very sad feeling
If you have time please review my Chapter one for Ash to Ash. I really need good advice on it.

[New Theory]

Thank you. I will review your chapter for sure. :)

[Taylor_McCutcheon]

thank you :) and no problem :)

[Brokensoul]

poetic brilliance at its best. Loved the line
It drizzles and gushes for hours
Until the last drops get their chance
To kiss the love drenched earth alas
Something a wait is worth it...

[New Theory]

Thank you Sonashree :).
Time has taught me if not anything, then to be patient :)

[Rachelle]

Through the melancholy there is anticipation. Go towards hope.

[New Theory]

Thank you Science Lady :). Hope I have loads of :)

[Tai Ryens]

One thing I've noted about this poem's atmosphere is that your speaker seems disconcerted, conflicted, sensing with their melancholy the bleakness of life as a whole yet acknowledging what blissful highs it is capable of. It makes your speaker feel as if they are fighting against both negativity and positivity, actively adopting a black & white frame of mind, which evidences a.. disturbance (for lack of a better word) or instability within your speaker. Well done.

[New Theory]

Thank you Tai, yes the poet is confused and disturbed .

[Utkarsh Singh]

awesome poetry NT .............its hard enough to move on until and unless we are supported by our dear once ...........

[New Theory]

Thank you Utkarsh

[Miles W.]

Wow...not only is this another superb poem, but I also relate to it very well. That feeling of dispar, that slight chance of hope, only to be taken away so that you can begin to heal and move on. Well done sir, well done.

[New Theory]

Thank you Miles :)

[Ayushi]

Yes it is very very hard. I hope you overcome soon..
I loved the way you presented the situation.
You are a true artist :)

[New Theory]

Thank you Ayushi :)