Sometime Around Sunrise

As it ends, sometime around sunrise,

Or at least that’s when your forced to admit

That your lover will leave

And you stand, at the end of her driveway

And the car is packed full

of the things that she cant live without.

And you don’t make the cut,

Your minds are both flooded with doubt.

And you’ll remember that face

But nothings left to talk about

 

But you know, that’s she cares too.

She’s weeping her eyes dry,

She’s holding on to you for love.

And its so f****n’ ironic.

A heart cast asunder by hope.

And you can only grasp tight.

To her legacy your sad mind will take home.

 

And so there’s a chink, in one of your armors

And all those memories

Play movies like midnight shows in your mind.

Of the nights that you held her,

And how hard she kissed you that time.

And your feeling helpless and desperate,

With no choice, and a shivering spine.

 

Then you leave, and you lose her forever.

But you make sure you see her,

The last time you’ll see her green eyes.

As you drive home to sob,

Your throat stuck on goodbyes.

You don’t care what you look like

You cant hold back your cowardly cries.

 

And you live, with this moment.

Your too lost to lose hope

Of the days when your life was alive.

You don’t care what the price is.

Its that life for which you’ll blindly strive.

　

　

　

　

　

　

Author's Note

So i kind of used an Airborne Toxic Event song as a sort of guideline for this but the story is something ive wanted to write about for a while. Let me know.

Reviews

[M.A. Van Dyke]

Boy, that took me to a place I haven't been in some time... Very good job. Her car being packed and him not making the cut is brilliant!

[Coyote Poetry]

Many sad moment happen in a life. Your poem told a story of one action that leave us alone and disappointed. I like the detail and the story. The small things will be missed. A very strong poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Randolf Ramos]

So sad, but we have to accept the reality! Great write

[Cassiopia Summers]

I think it was a great story. It falls into it's places easily and quickly. I believe you did well.

[Crusaderscross]

This actually truly a sad poem. The sense of loss or the emotion of loosing screams at the reader. The subject is so engulfed in their pain. Its seems nothing can help the reader through this ordeal except to linger and ponder the loss.

Really beautiful poem.

[nono]

Sunrise is pretty. Especially when it's a really deep red color. It's beautiful so is this poem. Very descriptive I love it!

[Michael of Gilead]

i don't know how much you used since i'm not familiar, but it seems pretty damn good to me

[Brad]

whoah, this one pulled a knot in my throat...i was there at the end of the drive watching, and now...i think you and i need to have a drink

[HermitsUnited]

You are absolutely amazingly spectacular at writing. That's all I can say. I'm speechless. Wow.

It really says it all. I love the poetic prose. Most people cannot accomplish detail and emotion at the same time. You did it brilliantly. :)