Sometime Around Sunrise

As it ends, sometime around sunrise,

Or at least that’s when your forced to admit

That your lover will leave

And you stand, at the end of her driveway

And the car is packed full

of the things that she cant live without.

And you don’t make the cut,

Your minds are both flooded with doubt.

And you’ll remember that face

But nothings left to talk about

 

But you know, that’s she cares too.

She’s weeping her eyes dry,

She’s holding on to you for love.

And its so f****n’ ironic.

A heart cast asunder by hope.

And you can only grasp tight.

To her legacy your sad mind will take home.

 

And so there’s a chink, in one of your armors

And all those memories

Play movies like midnight shows in your mind.

Of the nights that you held her,

And how hard she kissed you that time.

And your feeling helpless and desperate,

With no choice, and a shivering spine.

 

Then you leave, and you lose her forever.

But you make sure you see her,

The last time you’ll see her green eyes.

As you drive home to sob,

Your throat stuck on goodbyes.

You don’t care what you look like

You cant hold back your cowardly cries.

 

And you live, with this moment.

Your too lost to lose hope

Of the days when your life was alive.

You don’t care what the price is.

Its that life for which you’ll blindly strive.

　

　

　

　

　

　

Author's Note

So i kind of used an Airborne Toxic Event song as a sort of guideline for this but the story is something ive wanted to write about for a while. Let me know.

Reviews

[Ruth]

This is a great poem love, a sad and emotive piece that leaves the reader feeling the hurt and anguish!
The process of events within this are told really well, a wonderful piece of work
xx

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Beautiful. And its really good how it says a story. Great detailing.

[Ashesh]

Portrayal of helplessness and sadness so deeply engraved in your poem.
"Play movies like midnight shows in your mind." was the best line for me. Wonderful poem, thanks for sharing.

[Poetic Beauty]

this poem is deeply sad. Parting of ways is never easy especially if both people still care. I have been there and I know this feeling all too well and still live with it everyday regretting the moment that I walked away from the one person I now wish to hold again. These thoughts are projected vividly to the reader allowing me to feel what is being felt in the poem. strong word choices and the flow is nicely done.

[GrownUpTime]

love it! it seems so real

[Leanne Conway]

Love this poem!
=]♥[=

[Robin]

really well written , the emotion and sentiment of goodbyes , well displayed , this has a really good flow and pace , good dynamics

[Marie Harrison]

Very moving poem. Real love stays in the end though. I loved you poem.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

Airborne Toxic Event?? Cool :P.....

well written though, good thing there's not many resemblance there :P...
U had done well of telling the story through this writing, I kinda like that..
n urm...the ending part kinda twisting things up as now I feel really pitying the guy...nice write, well done..