Sonnet of Love

I wrote this about someone I like a lot. This is my first attempt at writing a sonnet. I used Shakespeare's ABAB CDCD EFEF GG format. Love or Hate let me know

 Although I have only known you for a week

 Every message you send makes me smile

Your love is what my heart came to seek.

 My love for you will last a great while.

 My lips wish to kiss yours every night.

 I want my body against yours.

 Laying next to you would be a wonderful sight.

 For your looks are what I adore.

 Our souls have become one

 Our bodies now belong to each other

 With you I feel like like i am loved a ton.

For you are my only lover

Baby promise you will always be mine

 I will be ours for all of time

Reviews

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Beautifully written sonnet. Sometimes our first meeting with someone can instantly spark a flame of our desires and it just might be true love.

[外人 (Gaiji..]

ok, first of all: oh honey !! second: Shakespeare's sonnet scheme?! I wanna give you a high five right now !! xD Great job for being your first sonnet, keep writing them and keep using Shakespeare's sonnet scheme, we all have a lot to learn from such a great writer *___*

[Cassie Fraga]

well penned... keep em coming!!

[Lokesh]

A good one. Well I don't know much about sonnet. I think you have done a good job. Keep it up.

[Aka_Kitsune]

love it very much so, first sonnet and i am hooked :D shakespearian sonnets are even harder in my own opinion then lets say, italian sonnets that i like to write :D great job though very creative

[EMMIE]

very creative and sweet

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

I am an expert of sorts when it comes to sonnets, and I can honestly say that this is very good for a first attempt! The rhymes are nice.

My only critique would be the meter. Traditionally, sonnets have a fixed meter, whereas yours is free. For example, try iambic pentameter. It's the easiest.

When I / have fears / that I / may cease / to be (John Keats)

It's five feet, for a total of ten syllables. Try it, it's a lot of fun to write! And remember to read your sonnets out loud to make sure they sound good on the tongue.

Good luck, and great job with this sonnet! :-)

[BikerAngie]

I wish you well with you new love interest. They should be honored by your poem such deep emotions. thank you for sharing