White (Rabbits, Sleeping Pills, and Sugar Packets)

White (Rabbits, Sleeping Pills, and Sugar Packets)

A Chapter by J. R.
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White is a clean, sterile color. It is the color of purity, snow, and prescription medication

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What happened last night?
I don't remember anything
And it doesn't feel right

When I'm able to think again
Please tell me what's going on
When this headache is gone
Is this for real?

The roses are dead
 Did I forget to paint them red?
It's 3:00 AM
The pills are out, I don't remember taking them

Am I that size again?
Wasn't I much smaller then?
I didn't want to be 
the size I am again

This is not the house it was when I went inside
And I don't think the doorway was ever quite that wide
It's 3:04
 Why are all the walls a different color than they were before?


© 2010 J. R.


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I'm a bit in a "white out" snow blizzard on this one. I think the title is great and might help woven into the poem along the way. White to me is a very barren shade, it's more diluting and less of a highlight. The time element really helps with the feeling of anxiety.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow I love this. It's a fantastic take on Alice in Wonderland and I adore every word of it.
Good use of questions to help the reader feel confused and the recurring use of time. It's disorientating but in all the right ways. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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