When I was a kid, I always felt too precocious for my age, and wanted to grow up as soon as possible. I thought Peter Pan was a stupid character, but now that I'm a grown up, I understand its appeal. Good observational skills, Dawn...made me picture the innocent child quite vividly.
I really liked this poem. The innocence of a child is something we yearn to hold on to, but don't always manage to fully grasp it. This made me both happy, and sad. It was extremely well written.
Bravo! I loved the beginning. I was smiling at the little girl. She reminded me of my daughter. She and her father used to create so much joy when doing the groceries! I’m afraid I may have lost my innocence. Oh well, I had to come see something you wrote after you sent me a friend request. I’m just a slave for the written word. I don’t really write... I probably won’t post anything, I’m afraid. I’m new here just 2 days and I don’t really know what I’m doing.
Very nice. When I was a child, I had to learn to be an adult. I couldn't act like a child, I had t harden myself. I even learned to never cry at age 3 because I'd get more beatings.
I agree dear Dawn. Would be a better world if we try to enjoy the days of life. I enjoyed the story in the poetry. Thank you for sharing your amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote
i wish children didn't grow up and become jaded and prejudiced and whatever else negative...yes the innocence of the child is grand...you probably want to go through this and fix the spelling..."innocence" all the way through...rather than "innocents"
but yes, the child who wants to please....and fears nothing.
I was worrying throughout the poem that the child would leave the mother and be kidnapped...glad that didn't happen.
j
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6 Years Ago
Thanks Jacob for the correct spelling of that certain work. And yes I totally agree wish children di.. read moreThanks Jacob for the correct spelling of that certain work. And yes I totally agree wish children didn't become jaded and prejudiced and whatever else negative as they grew up. Saldy that will never change part of life. And tragic that it happens. Dawn.