Forevermore

Rhyming Quatrains with a Rhyming Couplet envoi poem regarding thoughts of death... Grateful to Richard for finding the perfect artwork for my poem and helping me along my journey writing poetry.

   

     Forevermore....

Lie me down on a bed of lavender;

naked, I will be in the blazing sun.

Upon death, to this earth I surrender …

for, my journey here with you is now done.

Remember my laughter in ocean's waves …

floating along with no care in the world.

As we hid inside of deep dark sea caves,

our eyes met softly, as blue waters swirled.

Kissing your salty neck, I held on tight

with loving thoughts....I drift to you again,

watching day's sun disappear into night,

knowing our true love's depth would never wane.

Beyond life, to your open arms I soar;

our souls entwine now ~ and forevermore....

Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would so appreciate a review.
I always review.. Each line has 10 syllables.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

One of your finest works, Lisa🍷

Whoever said sadness and death have no beauty, never read this.
It was great working together with you in formulating this creatively gorgeous piece.

Many memorable blessings shared … thank you always, Ma'am! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

Hi Richard,
Great to get a review from you. This is one of my most favorite poems I have written.
Of course I have been thinking of you….and even more in the past couple of days.
My plan was to message you… and, and I will…
~ Lisa

[Kady R.]

Hiii Lisa!!! I'm new to the writers cafe and stumbled across your beautifully written poem about death. I love the idea of lying in a bed of lavender how wonderful that would be. The memories written in this poems sounds so romantic as well I love the juxtaposition here of life once lead and death. Very beautiful!!

[Lisasview]

Hi Kady,
How wonderful to get a review from you. I greatly appreciate it. As you know this is a poem about my own death...
I wonder how you happened on my poem... and again I am delighted that you did.
I hope you will find the time to read more... I love writing and have been away this past year but hearing from you makes me want to post more!
You might enjoy my poem written in metaphors... Innocence...
I see you want to be friends and I will ofcourse love to be friends..
Lisasview

[Kady R.]

Thanks Lisasview!!! I saw you reviewed a poem of Akinlolu writings which I also thought was lovely and quickly stumbled across your work. Wonderful work I'm a novice but I love poems so I'm giving it a shot. Yes I would love to be friends!!

I'll check out metaphors and innocence!! Very excited!! Yes I do hope you're able to do more work. I can picture what you wrote it was wonderful.

[emmajoygreen]

Hope all's well , you're writing less .

[Lisasview]

Just so busy … I did write a new one which I will post soon.
Lisa

[Dylan Macadham]

Hi Lisa, you've written the hope and dream of everlasting love beautifully :)
Dylan

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much Dylan.
Lisa

[Brandy]

Dear Lisa,
Your thoughts caress gently around me and my heart. This is beautiful, yet tender and emotional. ' Remember my laughter in ocean's waves …floating along with no care in the world. ' Memories will always be.

The photo matches your words perfectly.

Many wonderful blessings to you.

~ Brandy

[Lisasview]

Sorry Brandy for being tardy in my response..
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Lisasview

[Jeyanthi]

Dear Mam,
This poem is wonderfully written. Forever is prolong and adding more to it... gives the deep meaning to continuation...
The artwork visually pleasing, the white saying the peace stands out tall with bidding bye of calmness... a resting place...
Ocean brings the great emotion.. the laughter is always heard throughout.. wiping the salty tears.. when time comes I will be coming till then am passing every day glancing the sun...
Thanks for sharing your poetry..
Have a nice day!!
( it inspires me to write in a form)

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for reviewing my post..This means alot to me. Yes, spend time going over form as I feel that poems written in some sort of form are always the very best.
lisa, afternoon here in beautiful Spain.

[Abida~]

This is such a sweet poem.
The thoughts and memories that I can infer communicate so creatively.
Beautifully written!

[Lisasview]

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Lisasview, early morning in Spain

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

Lisa, this is such a magnificent poem. and it has a very important message. "the most important thing in one's life is to die gracefully," said a teacher of mine. and i concur, the last breath we take is the most precious gift.
i also write about death quite frequently. i'd love to know what you think of them.
see you around.

Ern.

[Lisasview]

Thank you for reading my poem Ern... This poem has gotten the most reviews of all my posts...
I will certainly be reading yours...
Lisa

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

pleasure is all mine. and you mentioned you have works that were written in your 20s? i'd love to read those ones as well, if you'd like to tell me where to look.

[Snow_]

Okay this is the kinds of poems I love. Expressing your own thoughts. So sweet. I also love how lavender means innocence while you had said "naked" it was like an added meaning. So amazing. And lavender also means protection as if it is communicating so many hidden messages. And as if it is said by an innocent girl to a lovely young man because of the color lavender painted on the words or an innocent man protecting him. I love this. And in my opinion lavender is a bit similar like hyacinth. Which is my fave color and flower.

Also I wish for you to critique my poem. It will not be published though. In social media account or in any way. Thank you lisasview. For your kind consideration. If interested message me plss.
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Okay i reread it again.. What did you meant by
As we hid inside of deep dark sea caves,
As was she not already dead....thank you again

[Thomas W Case]

Beautiful flow and imagery. Brilliant work.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem…
I really appreciate it,
Lisa, now living in Spain