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A Poem by [Dark]

What craves me?

So that I can’t leave

I can’t be

 

Come find me

I am lost

Somewhere I don't know

 

But can you save me

With no ache that hurts you

Without a vengeance that will defy you

With strength alone

 

The shield of immobility is far within my grasp

Can u penetrate it

Or shall it be unbreakable

 

With just a mighty glance

Shall it shatter

Or will it grow

Making such a thing untouchable

 

Will the chance be taken

bye someone of your skill

Bye the touch you hold

 

Or will you cower

And hide the truth

Not daring to think bout it

 

Who will save me

If shall not be you

Who will show me

Where the exit of the horid place shall be

 

If all you know is where is the key

Shan’t you save me

If no one but you knows the answer

 

If not

I shall not wait

I cant wait for someone

I shall stay and gain my strength

And I’ll leave one day

Without someone

Just myself and

myself alone

I’ll get through the greatest barriers

And get home

© 2008 [Dark]


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So sad.thats how most people are when they learn that you cant live without him/her. they treat you mo worse.
I like how you ended this poem "with faith". n faith is what everybody should have.when you have faith life becomes easy.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gripping write and well done. Lots of strength coming through. You'll definately get there friend.
FG

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I am a bit unsure of this piece. Not sure if the last stanza really goes with the rest. A few typos as well, but not too bad overall.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Its sad and beautiful.
Slow yet strong...
I wonder if its personal though i can relate...
Stark and magnetic!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really enjoyed this poem, Pearlday. It shows a softer exterior yet with an inner strength. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it. I can definately relate. It has a sort of rhthym to it. Like the verses, I mean. Well done!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very beautiful. And sad. And bittersweet. And yet--hopeful. You've managed to put all these here.

By the way--happy b-day! I hope your day treats you well.

Best--

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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