Repeat

The story is simple

Born in childhood

Rooted in adolescence

Groomed in adulthood

 

A cycle set on repeat

 

Second-best

Not enough

Unimportant am I

 

Failed relationships

Frustrations

A dark moment

Again

There it is

 

With any spark of a new adventure

Like a forgotten errand

It hurtles into my mind

 

Why bother

You’ll fail

What’s the point in trying?

 

I must halt this rhythm

End this redundant tale

 

Convince the child

Assure the adolescent

Reason with the adult

 

That story’s untrue

An unjustified lie

Bred of reckless tongues

 

You are worthy

Unique

Of value to many

 

And today

You are writing

 

So be it

Do it

Think it

And Repeat

Author's Note

Came to me before bed.....feedback always appreciated and as always thanks for reading:)

Reviews

[Brenda Caballero]

My first poem of yours and already thirsty for more. I wasn't sure where it was going, until my favorite stanza began.

"Convince the child
Assure the adolescent
Reason with the adult"

The positive contrast at the ending of the poem was really great. After I read it, I felt a weight lifted off my chest, almost as I can imagine this person feels once they realize this cycle has to stop. It's great, what you did here, with words. And my second favorite part of the stanza, aside from the precision in choosing your words, is the way it shows determination. You didn't imply the cycle that has been repeated for a lifetime was an easy fix. By walking through the stages of convincing, assuring, and reasoning, you satisfied me with the realistic idea that it's going to take just as much hard work and determination to be positive as there was force in this person from the start toward the negative. I'm very wordy, sorry. What I mean is, the change wasn't overnight, and that's what I loved the most. The hope that even if it takes a while, it will happen.

[Persephone]

Exactly! Thank you so much for the review and taking the time to read!

[Antonio Valentino]

and today, you, are writing..

that's it.. repeat the unrepeatable

what more can we ask for

lovely
:)

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[Enid Blake]

I like how the structure of the poem imitates that kind of erratic, running commmentary of the mind. Or at least that's how it felt to me when I read it!

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[Freedom's Child]

Great Piece! It does a great job of expressing how society teaches us we are never good enough. I love the emotion, for me it went from sorrow, to anger, to strength to overcome what others think. Nice work.

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[That_Girl]

This is my favorite poem of yours so far... I love it! Very smart... perfect!

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[Celestial Witch Child]

I really love the bare essence of this.

[Persephone]

Thank you:)

[Gothic Girl]

you don't really fail to surprise me every time I read one of your works. this what you called cycle is common to all of us. however, few only realize it then decide to do something about it. brilliant piece as always! :)

[Persephone]

Thank you so much! Glad you could relate :)

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This is very introspective. I love it ,my dear. Great job :)

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[Crazy Cat Man]

I love this piece. especially the beginning.

Second-best
Not enough
Unimportant am I



Failed relationships
Frustrations
A dark moment
Again
There it is

failed relationships always messes with our self esteem as if were not good enough. our insecurities can easily bring us down. love this piece

[Persephone]

Thank you for reading! Glad you liked it!

[An owl on the moon]

There is a dance in your words that moves across mindscapes... emotions that can grip us or startle us or stop us completely... You give such a depth of insight into the mind and the questions that come, and you give us hope that we can make it through. Loved it!

[Persephone]

Thank you so much Craig!

[Sami Khalil]

And you are a worthy poet/poetess I might add.

[Persephone]

Thanks Sami! I do believe I am :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.