Why would you?

When I think about our possible futures,

I realize that there is the potential for much pain,

For the loss of some of those we hold dear,

And logic does not dictate well that path for us.

Why would you risk the pain?

Why would you suffer the loss?

Why would you follow your heart,

Rather than listening to your logic?

I cannot offer answers concrete and safe,

Because I only offer a life full of passion and desire.

Passion for each other and discovering the wonders of the world.

A desire to apply our passion for the betterment of others.

In you, with you my passion is fueled.

Because of you my desire to full my passion's fate is strong.

Without you my passion dies away,

My desire to help others becomes a lost trail.

I would risk the pain.

I would suffer the loss.

I would follow my heart.

If you will but join me in this illogical pursuit.

Reviews

[Emberlorna]

I would risk the pain.
I would suffer the loss.
I would follow my heart.

Very moving.. Really loved the ending :}

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

"My desire to to help others becomes a lost trail."
I believe you only meant to put "to" once, haha.

Anyways, I really love the message that this tells, beautiful write.

[Persona]

This is really good and I can't think of any way that it needs improvement so well done Patrick! A wonderful layout, expressive, descriptive stanzas, a very personal touch and a good use of directly addressing the reader.

[Dr. Wood ?]

You only have one life you should do what you NEED to do

[quinfinn]

love the message herein and i felt every line to the marrow.

[David Scott]

I do not think that passion and desire need to be illogical...
I like your thoughts and your general gentle presentation here, but I'm asking myself why not. The other path is worse... I believe that the only logical path to travel is one that will lead us to know ourselves in our fullest expressions. That cannot be done in solitude alone.
As a poem I found this more a narrative of a thought and the form did not add or take away from the intention. I would like to see the form add meaning to the writing. Still, worth the read.
Got me thinking Patrick. I like to think! Ha
Be well.

[Tarry Franck]

This is a very good poem - loved the ending

["writing by" KS]

Thank you for asking me to read this, it was an honour. In short .. beautiful.. I could feel the raw emotion in every line.. I can relate to this piece.. perfect.. thank you again.

[Coyote Poetry]

Some risks are worth the chance. I like the many good questions in the poem. I like the ending a lot.
"I would risk the pain.
I would suffer the loss.
I would follow my heart.
If you will but join me in this illogical pursuit."
Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Adam Whitworth]

nice sentiments, dull plain language, didnt make sense in places, but a good try, carry on