Mind Wanders

Sometime my mind wanders through wastelands
Of barren loves left unattained
And heated sand that blisters
Leaving tiny scars upon the heart
Small intricate patterns of art

Shortness my mind wander through swamps
Of yesterdays trials resolved
Yet murky waters cloud my vision
Blocking what’s already been cleared
Wispy fog floating with what’s feared

Sometimes my mind wanders through oceans
Deep po swimming sadness unrealistic
As tidal waves of emotions crash
As the weight feels heavy inside
Until there it a shift in the tide

Sometimes my my wanders through the sky
Of moonless grasping of things not seen
Clouds that whisper splendid faerytales
Lies that leave destruction in its wake
Harsh words that bluster are only fake

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

My mind wanders too and not always to beautiful places and pósitive thoughts. This poem appears to be focusing on the negative. Barren loves and sand that blisters are strong images that do little for a soft heart. Your stanzas are always composed with careful thought. You write so well PB.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. Yes my mind will try to focus on negatives if I let it so I’m slowly making it shift to more positive thoughts. It takes time.

The imagery and idea for each stanza is thought about and I go line by line and stanza by stanza. Sometimes I do free flow poems. Many times even if my poems rhyme they don’t have a precise flow.

[nadia dmitri]

Very well crafted stanzas, such vibrant descriptions, you can feel the connection through the page

[Poetic Beauty]

I’m glad you could feel the connection through the pages. Thank you for reading !!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like the construction of this....and the four sectors it covers...

I would have liked it even more with just the first stanza as the entire poem...

Those five lines could stand on their own.

nicely done.
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you for the compliment

[Writergurl]

Such a relatable write here, nicely written

[Poetic Beauty]

I think we all have those moments when our mind wants to be negative and tell us false information lol

[Masked writer]

I love this, very poetic, very relatable, very real.

[Poetic Beauty]

Yes it definitely 👍 s

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Magnificent work. In this day and she where technology moves like the speed of light it is hard to not reminds move at that speed to.

[Poetic Beauty]

Trying to slow the brain and life down can be quite the challenge and making it shut down

[Pete]

doesn't sound like very nice places to be wandering. i like how you used powerful elements of nature to describe the "places"/feelings where her mind wandered. we all need to be careful of what comes out of our mouths. sometimes we need to find a new path.

[Poetic Beauty]

My brain likes to focus on negative even if there isn’t really one. I’ve been working on focusing my thoughts on more positive thoughts instead

[Pete]

me too. i hear ya'.

[Anita Frader]

An evocative write, PB. Strong images.

[Poetic Beauty]

I like to add strong visuals to help the reader

[Thomas W Case]

Tremendous work. You take the reader right into the scene.

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. I like to add a lot visual aspect to my poetry

[Fabian G. Franklin]

My mind only wandered once. I've been looking for it ever since. I lost it when I was very young so I hope I can recognize it now. As our thoughts age do they turn to wine like fermented grapes; some intoxicating concoction of rapidly firing synapses or do they simply wander away like the Australian aborigine across a vast and empty plain of unwelcoming outback? Let the mind wander where it may, I say. Going walkabout doesn't seem like such a bad idea at times.

[Poetic Beauty]

Unfortunately sometimes mind likes to focus on negatives that are no longer relevant or aren’t really negative so I have to make myself think more positive

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Sounds like the old Bing Crosby tune, Accentuate the Positive, eliminate the negative. I'd just "like to swing on a star and carry moonbeams home in a jar." I sang that song to my little girl and she thought it was funny. We do much music in this house. :)

[Poetic Beauty]

We do a lot of music as well