Out of Reach

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Thoughts violently dance about
Swaying then quickly shifting
A constant pushing and pulling
Overthinking is on display
Complete chaos at its devilish

The sensual spell now twisted
Wrapped in silvery tight thread
Smothering the deep fire within
Chaffing with its constricting hold
As its strings begin to cut in

A long night of self doubt rises
Without an answer in sight
Turbulent thoughts keep waving
Pounding on the distant shore
Scattering words across the sand

Some buried under wet grains
Others on tall tendrils of grass
Yet a few trapped on a dock
Scantly close but still out of reach
Taunting with glowing minimal hope

Reviews

[Amy R]

😯😯
What a write, filled with so much emotions that is tied to struggling internally,
Its a sad yet very frustrating thing, felt this in a deep level,
I can relate to overthinking so much at times, and not having a solution/answer, makes it harder.
A very emotion but powerful write.
-Amy

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you. I think may of us struggle from time to time with overthinking

[Amy R]

Yes thats right. 😕 Once we don't stay there.
You're welcome ..

[emmajoygreen]

Insight and thoughtfulness holding the pen here. Whether it is the poet or writer who can let that pen run away with emotions is anyone's guess if vulnerability is hurt by a rebellious roar about the state of his or head head, wrapped for now from a quake ready to explode. You have written with veins open, seeping.. raw words displayed. I feel so sad for you.

'Turbulent thoughts keep waving
Pounding on the distant shore
Scattering words across the sand'

[Poetic Beauty]

It can be complicated at moments and overthinking doesn’t help

[emmajoygreen]

True. The more one thinks the more there is to think about. Best go out, see what there is to entice your glances and. with luck, will fill your mind with at different and kinder thoughts, maybe
perhaps, who knows.

[Poetic Beauty]

I tend to put on meditation music and sit quietly in moments of solitude making my mind slow down and refocus my train of thought. It takes work and patience to get it rerouted but many times I can make my thoughts shift to less negative lies lol

[willweb]

Reminds me of a song by Sting titled "I can't stop thinking about you" To me the poem is speaking of the search for solitude and the ability to express thoughts, hopes and dreams or even worries and fears in a way that others will understand and know the feeling the other is experiencing. At least that is how I read it.

[Poetic Beauty]

We all have self doubts and I have many moments of overthinking. Times when I need to try to get my brain to refocus and quiet from the noise of the world

[Pete]

very well written. a plague of thoughts. too much thinking is not good. troubling when solutions seem "out of reach". strong imagery well described (maybe too well). ouch.

[Poetic Beauty]

I have mild anxiety so overthinking is a thorn in my side many times and it can be irritating and frustrating. I’ve learned little tricks to get my mind to settle down some.

[Pete]

i have the same problem.

[Poetic Beauty]

Meditation and making my mind refocuse helps or reading lol

[Pete]

that's probably why i'm into music so much.

[Poetic Beauty]

I am a lover of music. Tv is typically on for background noise lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the best dance of the mind...is freeform...
just letting the thoughts dance about.
It is like the poem "Mind" by Richard Wilbur.
the thoughts beat about in a cave like bats...flittering about weaving...but never really slamming against a wall of conclusion...as Wilbur says.
Thoughts will find their way to the paper as poems if we let them breathe on their own.
Exceptional piece...in first line did you mean "dance"?
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

Yes and thank you I will correct the typo.

Thank you for reading this poem. Thoughts do dance many times without an answer or a conclusion

[Ana Papaya]

Yup. Definitely understand this one. 👍🙂

[Poetic Beauty]

I think many of us do this too much especially with the face paced chaotic world we live in sometimes

[Mauricio Montoya]

PB I'm going with title this write is deep for the reader because ur telling me it's hard to comment because one see themselves, its hard to reply because its a conflict of interest because you've made a point.Thank you for sharing something I need to think but nevertheless good read thank you for sharing.

[Mauricio Montoya]

But I love great write.

[Poetic Beauty]

So it is about overthinking and not having answer and pondering over things that don’t need to be questioned

[Neville]

No need to over think .. I know this is darn good .. and deeper than my recent root canal .. bravo PB

[Poetic Beauty]

Thank you!! It is something we all do from time to time

[Neville]

............................... 😉👍

[Lorry]

Your second verse sounds like any time I've used a sleeping back. I always end up twisting myself, my clothes and the sleeping bag all into knots and have to fight my way out, but it was easily remedied. I just bought a double sleeping bag and no longer sleep in my penguin onesie! 😀
But on a more serious note, it sounds like you need to Bobby Mcferrin it. Just listen to don't worry be happy on repeat and before long all those twists will unkink and you'll be back to you're normal "mature warning" style! 😀
I do remember when overthinking was a problem for me, but thanks to long covid my thoughts now rub like syrup and rarely have two in the same day, let alone the same minute. I wouldn't recommend that as a cure though, because it ages you in dog years!

[Poetic Beauty]

That’s for you expected humor that makes me giggle. Sorry you had the Covid and it rubbed your mind the wrong way or was it you whole body? Hmm 🤔 anyway I shall be back the normal mature status before long. I have days and those days are a bit perplexing and dreary but I have a quick bounce back rate typically 2.2 seconds

[alexAlexander]

Nicely pen. We've all been there. So I would say to be still my chatting thoughts. And stay buried under wet grains and embrace my glowing minimal hope.

[Poetic Beauty]

I’m glad you liked the details in this poem. Thank you for you kind review and for reading

[alexAlexander]

You are much welcome and keep writing.

[Davidgeo]

Do you listen to Tool? You should listen to older Tool, Anemia and Lateralus, etc... it's good music. The lyrics are good for poets to listen to. The music is a pretty heavy but, it's real clean. Like, they are all amazing musicians. (the lead singer is the least talented, but he can write and sing very well)

[Poetic Beauty]

I have listened to Tool. I’m a huge lover of most music but heavy metal is my favorite