Alluring Package

There is wonder in your eyes
And splendor in your smile
Only adding to the unique, completely you style

There is a silence
That most of the world doesn't see
That deep inside you aren't always happy

A creativeness dwells within
But it has been caged,  pushed away
Keeping all things passionate shut out, at bay

There a deeper side
That is trapped wanting out
Yearning, screaming with angry screeching shouts

There is a wild side
Fun, loud, completely free
That the whole wide planet is allowed to see

An energy that sizzles
Captivating those who are around
Sucking out the laziness, beating it completely down

Outside a sexiness shows
Luring the unsuspecting person in
Inside the personality is what make the heart quake, a love begin.

Reviews

[kewlbluetiger]

We are so complex! The stanzas are really powerful because the meaning in the words are conveyed without any waste. Each is measured with well thought-out depth. You use the words "You" and "Your" in the first stanzas, and they disappear in the latter, giving us a feeling of intimacy with the "alluring package"! Very interesting write, it must have been inspired by someone. . . hmmm?

[ICE]

A lovely piece of writing. We all have layers and I think that you did a great job at showing some of them off.

[alesuriko]

Very good description of a person's many layers. It's rather easy to connect to and empathize with. Good job!

[shayne]

Great way to capture the reality of having to keep a part of you from the world

[MissWordSmith]

nice. deep!!! very well written.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A great description of how a person always has different layers not to mention the encouragement you give the person in releasing their full potential.

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is amazing. The description and the story in your words was outstanding. I like how you describe the man in private and what the world can see. A well written story about a lucky man. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Bette]

hummm... who is this about??? lol in all seriousness this is great.

[untoldtruth]

I love how in almost all the stanzas you rhyme the last letter of the last word.
The descriptions are great

[Subjective Sanity]

I dig it! I like your 3 line style. Ever write any haikus?