Losing Control

Losing Control

A Poem by Sports Girl

Stars twinkle bright in the midnight sky

Outside, snowflakes sparkle as they drift to the ground

Candles create a walk way for me as I continue down the hall

A flower path extends down the floor leading me to her


At the end of the path holds an intoxicating smell

The light from the candles illuminate the bedroom walls

Red and white petals cover the floor like a blanket

  It’s as beautiful as the sight of the first snow untouched


Standing there in front of me is an angle like figure

The very sight of her almost knocks me off my feet

Light flickers across her incredible and flawless body

Her big beautiful eyes catch my gaze and pull me in


She moves towards me step by step almost dance like

Leaning to the side of me she presses her perfect lips against my neck

As her lips climb up me they find my lips

The heat between us increases as our tongues intertwine


Her gentle hands move under my shirt and up my body

Dropping it to the floor she wraps her arms around me

Our bodies press up against each other as our hearts begin to race

Her soft skin making it that much harder to resist


Taking my hand she leads me over to the bed

I watch as what little clothes she has on slips to the floor

She giggles and shows her breath taking smile

She crawls over towards me her perfume flooding my senses


With each passing second I lose more control to her

Her lips trace up and down my body leaving a warm sensation

Once again our lips meet creating a fire between us

Knowing she’s won I give in and roll her onto her back

© 2010 Sports Girl

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you can feel the passion and feel like your there. very good i like it.

Posted 9 Years Ago

Wow stunning imagery !
I could almost feel the snowflakes
Your words grasped my hand and
took me into a beautiful journey

Posted 9 Years Ago

Wow. It felt like i was there. Really great job.

Posted 9 Years Ago

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geeze, just let me get over my blush here...hahaha.

Hmm, interesting that now you speak of a woman...
This plays well, like a love scene from a movie.
I'm going to say it's your best by far
Well done, drew me into the scene...so a skilled write. Thanks muchly

Posted 9 Years Ago

I love this, you can imagine everything perfectly! It is beautifully written!

Posted 9 Years Ago

whew! uh nice work. All kidding aside, this is quite sensuous and descriptive. not quite what I would expect from an angel, or would I?

Posted 9 Years Ago

Full of beauty and passion. A very enjoyable read. The scene you paint is perfection, mainly because you leave the reader room to place the object of their desire into the poem by not being too descriptive. You give the reader the fuel, and their mind adds the small spark needed for the perfect warm mental fire. I enjoyed reading this very much. Thanks for sharing! Well done!

Posted 9 Years Ago

You create a very powerful poem. The emotion being awaken and the walls being torn open to gentleness and desire. A excellent poem. Thank you.

Posted 9 Years Ago

potent and passionate work, this was very deep writing you've got here! i just loved your imagery here! good work!
and it's about time i reviewed some of yours!

Posted 9 Years Ago

A dream of a perfect love, a most endearing love something we all would all love to taste, but all to often it's not like that at all, well written poem

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Sports Girl

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