Desert Rose

Estranged in a distant land;
Filled with sunburns and sand,
Pulsing on the parched ground;
Thumping with its unique sound.

Delicately laid at your feet;
Quietly strumming it's beat,
Pulsing a rhythm all its own;
Potently a passion is shown.

Pleading to be caressed, with need;
An organ, sobbing it bleeds,
Hungry for your love it pleads;
Maroon heart, the desert rose,
Waiting with patience at your toes.
 

Author's Note

the last stanza is a little different. Tell me if you think it affects the flow.

Reviews

[R E Tree]

The first stanza blew me away with the use of rhyming words that get me drawn totally. I can tell your writing skills have improved a lot. I compared this with one of your old poems and I can see how your writing skills have grown beautifully. Keep writing because you are such a great writer

[Jenny Nelson]

I like the rhyme pattern. If fits your words and emotion well. Can't decide if the change up in the last stanza is awkward or not. It is out of pace with the rest of the poem, but being that it's the last stanza, it also seems to wrap up the piece well. I like this. Well done.

[Steve]

I think the last stanza fits......

Maybe its just me but this one almost seems PG? :0)

[Ruth]

I love the flow!
I think the last stanza adds impact love! :)
A rose holds such power!
Beautifully crafted, love it!
xx

[Ladysue]

I loved this. This is excellent. Imagery was great. I feel the depth of meaning. Great title...awesome work...

[Sean M. Addams]

i don't think the last stanza affects the flow ..liked the imagery and rhyme and the deep thoughts that are woven through this piece..nice work

[Dream Weaver]

Amazingly done. Last line included.
I love the way you've painted this
desert with a single rose..nice job.