Darkness falling upon the cement ground Emotions twisting into agony and pain Teardrops swirling sobbing the only sound Dampness invading taking hold of the reigns
Aching inside consumed with loss Blackened onyx permeates all feelings Heartache burning, becoming the boss Spirit screaming loudly for healing
Longing growing stronger by the day Yearning increasing with each second Sadness thriving wanting to come play Charcoal spirit, for kindness it does beckon
Hungering for honest sweetness to be found Craving kindness in earnest to save A binding of spirits already have bound Separated by distance, a passion's grave.
what I get from this piece is trying to find peace from an impending problem that can not be resolved and the more you contemplate the stronger the force enclose you. nevertheless I like the choice of words that bring this piece together with amazing flow. Excellent write.
A powerful story hidden in the words. The poem is needed to be read a few times.
"Charcoal spirit, for kindness it does beckon". So many lines jump at me. Your words powerful and with purpose. I like the complete poem. Last lines made the poem complete. A excellent poem.
Coyote
An excellent poem, giving off an abstract feel. You give just the right amount of info on the subject, and your rhyming works well with it. I normally have a problem with rhyme, but you didn't seem to use anything that struck me as to cliche here.
what I get from this piece is trying to find peace from an impending problem that can not be resolved and the more you contemplate the stronger the force enclose you. nevertheless I like the choice of words that bring this piece together with amazing flow. Excellent write.
This honestly is one of my favorites. I can feel everyword and every emotion that is printed through ink. This flows very well and the emotions are almost 3d off the paper. The reader can feel the lonliness of the writer and mit made me feel lonely just by reading it. It also didnt help that i am listening to a song about loneliness. Great poem!
In this poem I get the sense of inner peace as the person goes comes to grips with mortality and is ready when death calls for they have peace in their heart and compassion in their soul.
First off I'm on here to post my writing to have an outlet for my emotions. You will find a variety of poems. If you like take a moment and stroll through this poets mind.
Secondly be kind to each .. more..