Destiny in snow

It's about the result of not being able to handle the drama of the heart

Pink falls to grey

My heart questions

Will I stay

 

He's so cold, and frigid

He's so nice and loyal

He'll never lie 

 

Or cause my heart

To die

 

My puppy is so warm

So protective

 

Broken past forlorn

 

He's so violent

His temper so giant

 

Always demands

To be compliant

 

He's so mean, so harsh

I think my heart's

Held captive

 

I've left him

In my panic

 

Lost and blinded

By my tears

 

The pain

It's caused lost voices

To fall down

 

It has guided me to snow

 

They wisper, "the cold,

it will numb the pain."

My eyes go hallow

Even I feel empty

 

The snow's so soft

 

He's stern but I'll stay

I would've never guessed

Destiny would come today

 

It has come to me in the shadows

In the cold

 

It came at my worst

While I grieve dismay

 

It came, when needed

When nothing was ok

 

Reviews

[Alexa Tasch]

Very deep! You can feel the conflict throughout the poem. It flowed well and was beautifully written. Great job!!

[Muse]

Interesting write. I enjoyed this very much!

They wisper, "the cold,
it will numb the pain."
My eyes go hallow
Even I feel empty
The snow's so soft

cold and powerful.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much! :-) that's what I was going for

[Emberlorna]

Wow the imagery you portray is stunning I absolutely love this piece! Thanks for sharing :}

[Blue Ivory]

This is really sad and touching. Well done!

[Emrick]

I like the first stanza a lot. you started very nicely.
Good poem!.

[Zerth]

I could relate to this in many ways. I truly loved it.

[annonymous]

this is amazing it honestly took my breath away :)

[kublakhan27]

I think this is the first winter-themed piece I've read on the eve of its latest incarnation...your writing is always imaginative, to the point where the images almost overpower the words that relay them, making the poem a collection of mental images as opposed to a collection of written words...well done XD

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

aww thanx kub!!! you always say the sweetest things :-) this is a very old poem of mine actually I wrote it when I was fourteen I believe

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome :) That's incredible...I was still a year or two away from even considering the notion of writing my own stuff at that point lol...you are surely a natural if that's the case...and I'm not just saying that to be sweet, it's true :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

well it always makes me smile anywho :-)

[kublakhan27]

:)

[beautiful dreamer]

i love how you rhyme :)

[SmileBig :)]

Very very nice. I really enjoyed this :) its really sweet but sad