Big brother's bed

no this is not about incest you pervs! get your minds out of the gutter It's about a pure little girls delight in the simple things in life :-)

It feels good, I'm light

I feel flowy

I could take flight

I'm almost gone

And then I'm back

My world turns gold

Instead of black

I sink deep

And let out a sigh

What a heavenly night

Davey's bed would never deny

Now instead of light

I'm heavy

My limbs like their made of jelly

Mornings come

The birds do sing

The only way to describe

Is if you truly do

Know what I mean

Reviews

[Pratik]

Loved it! This froths with the innocence of a little child! I remember when I we ( me n my siblings ) were small and our cousins used to visit us, we used to fight with each other over who get to sleep where. It made me remember those days! Nice one!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx!!! I was in a really nastolgic mood when I wrote it. :-)

[J. Viands]

I totally get it I remember crashing with my siblings not only could it be fun but also comforting reminding you who has your back and who’s back you got in return honest lovely piece

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx J. :-) im glad you got it!

[Captivating Ink]

Luckily I still have a touch (and may I put emphasis on touch) of innocence left that I did not get an innuedo from the title until I read the description and thought about it. I like how this portrays falling asleep in a nice cozy bed :) It almost makes me want to go to bed!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thanx so much CI!!! im rly glad you enjoyed it hahah and congrats on retaining at least "some" innosence rofl

[Captivating Ink]

Haha that or I'm brain-dead from work ;P

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

hopefully your innocent and not a zombie :-P

[Heromen Selena]

Haha Honestly I thought dirty at first. I had to try really hard to see the deep meaning in this. I know exactly what you mean though. I don't have a brother but my sisters and I used to switch beds all the time :) Good poem.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I thpught many ppl wud get the right idea hahaha thats y a put up that description :-P I'm glad you liked it

[Sukhmeet Singh]

Not lots of comma's, but I am impressed

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thanx! :-) I don't personally think you need a lot of commas with poetry especially since this poem has short verses ya know?

[Sukhmeet Singh]

Alright, if you can prove your point, then you can do it

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

ok poetry is made of verses not sentences and the only reason you need commas even sometimes is for beat if your making them into sentence for finality or if you have extremely long verses.

[Sukhmeet Singh]

Good job in explaining your way of poetry, very nice explaining, good job

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thank S.S I do try

[SmileBig :)]

Cool, I like it :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx TLN