Big brother's bed

no this is not about incest you pervs! get your minds out of the gutter It's about a pure little girls delight in the simple things in life :-)

It feels good, I'm light

I feel flowy

I could take flight

I'm almost gone

And then I'm back

My world turns gold

Instead of black

I sink deep

And let out a sigh

What a heavenly night

Davey's bed would never deny

Now instead of light

I'm heavy

My limbs like their made of jelly

Mornings come

The birds do sing

The only way to describe

Is if you truly do

Know what I mean

Reviews

[Dr. Wood ?]

children would think like this..the whole world is a mystery to them and every thing different is an adventure...great poem quite expertly written

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much!!! im wly glad you enjoy my stlye. I quite enjoy becoming who I write about it. I try to think as they would think as you will see if you continue to enjoy my writing.

[Dr. Wood ?]

I will surely take a look..I write mostly for kids..and take the child's POV....My stuff is mainly humorous nonsense..but there are not many writers on here who do it

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

if you write for kids youd probally enjoy this poem I wrote called Isaac Newton its very silly yet still educational

[Dr. Wood ?]

I think I read it. but i'll take a look

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol kay :-)

[That_Girl]

I'm sorry but I saw the title and... yeah. Very pleasantly surprised though! It's sweet and light. Very nice. :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

hahaha thats what I thought wud happen so thats why I put in that description :-DD Im glad u were pleasantly suprised !

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Great flow; an interesting little whimsical piece that sounds like a sort of fairy tale. The little girl appears mesmerised.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

glad you liked it!!! :-D

[Christopher Steven Evan..]

Nice poem Emily, short but sweet. It obviously comes from a place of love and warmth and this is conveyed well in the poem. Nice work.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

im glad you liked it chris! :-) thanx

[The Refined Poet]

I like it, it reminds me of how it seems that my parents bed always felt better and more plush than my own, so it would be a treat to get in their bed... Excellent write...

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thanx! :-)

[Yheela]

Comforting.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx

[Coyote Poetry]

Good to sleep in a warm bed. I like the story. When we are young. Those beds of family members look tempting. Larger and more blankets. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

no prob coyote im glad you like it :-)

[Liderien]

very nice

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx lideriend! im glad you likeed it :-)

[Hester Vane]

This is a sweet piece. Well written. Good job

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

aww thanx hester im glad you liked it. I had sweet thoughts while writing it so im glad you thought it sweet as well

[Pax]

the little intro above made me guard my thinking in time time to read the below poem.. lol... i think this is just a facination in your brother's bed.. it must be much comfy..about it..
great write...

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

It really was very comfy it was a heated waterbed lol theres nothing like sinking into one of them let me tell you especially since I used to love up north it was especiallt blissful an the cold nights

[Pax]

seems...like heaven sleeping there...nice!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

hahaha yeah it rly was oooh now you got me all nostalgic I do miss that bed they discontinued them ya kow you cnt buy them anymore

[Pax]

oh..that's sad...I'd like to sleep on it...

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

i know.. I was so sad when I found out