My first kill

My first kill

A Poem by LynLee

My first kill

 

 

The thought was scary,

At first,

I thought I was,

Insane.

The first drop of blood,

touching my finger,

driving my mind,

in a haze.

At first my car,

was only speeding down the road,

but then you walked in front,

blocking my way,

surprising me,

making sure that i'd hit you.

I stopped and tried to move,

but you moved as I did,

and I hit you dead center,

only,

you weren't dead.

You were breathing,

you chest heaving.

I ran to your side,

with the blood gushing,

I reached for my phone,

but you screamed,

"End my life! End it now! I deserve nothing! Kill me with this knife, it has history of my family and war. Kill me with honor."

All I thought was,

What is this dude thinking,

He has honor of jumping in front of my car,

And being hit?

And now he's telling me to just stab him?

Making sure that he dies with "honor"?

I walked inside of my car.

Good. I thought,

It's still intact.

I started it up,

and looking at the guy in the road,

I had tears in my eyes,

What was I doing?

Do I want to do this?

Am I really meant for this?

Then I thought,

He told me to do this.

 

*       *              *

I headed straight towards him.

The guy's face before I hit him,

was priceless.

He now has no honor.

*         *        *

 

I'm glad I met that guy.

He helped me figure out,

a new thing about my life.

I'm good at killing.

And now I read the papers,

After all i'm always on the front page.

© 2010 LynLee


Author's Note

LynLee
sorry if it's a bit confusing, i just thought while i typed

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Very interesting! I like the twist at the end.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I liked it. I didn't think it was confusing. My only problem with it is that you don't have to have a comma after every line, but other than that it was fantastic. Keep writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Hmmm Slightly scary, yet still impressive! :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


i thought this was ok.

Posted 13 Years Ago


The poem was good. Your emotions were shaky like they would be when someone kills another person. Very well done:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow...I will e calling next time I need a good killing, LOL. Nice frenetic pace and although pretty dark it did hit on what could be a primeval instinct for some people. Nice write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


The poem took me on a wild journey. The first kill is used by hunters for the honor of their first kill. Poem was a surprise. I like the story. Had reason and purpose. A very good ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago



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LynLee
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