Transitions

in collaboration with Nisreen

"Transition"

Mammals wailed in disbelief

whose voices echoe in the deep

The Blues in saxophone relief

twenty tons of krill eating teeth 

A miracle was birthed 

In full bravery

A figure of man 

Brought peace to the land

from the soup of primordial mix

hides in plain sight, octopus tricks

spills ink jets when spotted

unwinding his reach previously knotted

Unhiding a double face

One face appeared

mirrored

With all its ugliness

Tolerating peace 

negotiations repleat

Creating so much noise

simply vocal 

Confusing the masses in news

it was essential ...

built to destroy

writings of justice 

burning the toll

Liars in wicked teeth of brown

Dying in the dawn

Melting in snow

ignorant

transition expedient

relative ingredient

matters not

which face one wears.

E. with Nisreen

Author's Note

Reviews

[.]

-- for me (someone whose first language is not english), this poem describes the anatomy of evolution... and the concluding lines reveal that despite all the commotion caused by people who make a lot of noise or lie, human beings continue to evolve... because those who create a cacophony are not the architects of evolution... they're merely "ingredients"... and their importance is not substantial in the larger scheme of things... it's "relative" to other ingredients... -- -- mammals still turn into human beings and human beings get better with time despite the presence of noisy rotten apples...

-- from this perspective, the poem does a fantastic job of describing the intricate details of the process of evolution... -- the collab is flawless... (one cannot tell who wrote which lines)... so well done both of you... -- the two of you are 'thinking' people... and there aren't too many around so thank you for writing this intensely thought-provoking symphony...

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness serah!!!! your review captures my breath .. well read ...so intuitive and precise .. seems the honor to be ours for your reading .. no kidding!!! can't wait till Nisreen reads this .. thank you to the max!
E.

[.]

-- my privilege, E... -- i love pieces that delve into the depths of the human condition... and once again... you and Nisreen did a fab job... -- very seamless collab... :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much!

[.]

-- you're very welcome, sweet one :)

[Lydia Shutter]

You're welcome E. happy V day!

[Neville]

The Blues in saxophone relief
twenty tons of krill eating teeth... oh my, my imagination just got the better of me again my friend and what a catalyst these words proved to be...good on ya both............. N

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks for your encouraging review Neville .. imagination can run away with us at times ... i just read this again and honestly.... not sure what it means ;} but it sure was fun working with Nisreen ... peace brother!
E.

[Neville]

I know exactly what you mean, if you know what I mean & my pleasure, my friend.... N

[Ken Simm.]

I find that when you tackle the large subjects, cosmology, evolution, life itself; you come into your own as a poet. This combined write is seamless and intelligent. Makes the reader do more than think. Makes them consider the large subjects. Excellently done both of you.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks so much Ken! such a treat to write with Ms. Nisreen! and i sure appreciate your reviewing sir .. and kind remarks
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Evolution at its finest! We are all small fragments of the universe....truly not as important as we pretend to be. Those who make the most noise are not necessarily the most important. Such a thought provoking write...and the two of you blended ink so well I can not tell who wrote which lines! Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Lydia! so glad you enjoyed the trip ;) i couldn't agree more .. we are so very small after all .. i think those who do not come to that point loose out on the best part of the journey ... such peace in humility and acceptance ..love your comments ..thank you again!
E.

[Katrina Mckeown]

So much imagery...a very well sculptured poem. ..loved reading this, !

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Katrina! and i am so pleased to meet you ... will be stopping by your place asap .. glad you enjoyed the read for sure ..and your encouraging words
E.

[Nisreen]

Nisreen misses you :)

[Einstein Noodle]

what a kind and wonderful thing to say! thank you so much River!!! i will be sure to stop by her place and yours ... love and peace!
E.

[Nisreen]

If only I was her and she is me :p

[Einstein Noodle]

well your eyes are stunning ... as hers ... i am honored to know you both .. ;) already subscribed to you my friend .... i see Nisreen has closed her page ..i guess you will have to fill the void :)) thank you for letting me know in a cute and wonderful way

[Nisreen]

lol .......... Nisreen was wrong to close her profile she was overwhelmed with trouble but now shes back :)

[Einstein Noodle]

i for one am very thankful ..such a unique style ..

[Nisreen]

Friends for life :)

[Einstein Noodle]

thats a deal! i'll hold you to it!

[JessyJacob]

So nice of you.

[ms. barrie]

I agree with Dara: the images both you and Nisreen weaved
into this, is astounding. amazing execution & word play.

personally, for me, the first few stanzas reminds me of
the song/film "the yellow submarine" - either way...
this is indeed a wonderful collaboration by both of you.
Thank you for sharing (:
~ xx - barrie

[Einstein Noodle]

The Yellow Submarine!! i saw it when it first came out ..with my first "real" girlfriend .. :) tickled this caused you to think of it ..thanks you!
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

What I like about this is the sharpness and clarity -- seamless as a collab, I cannot see where one ends and one begins. The whale imagery is stunning. The world doesn't need us -- we should take heed.:)

[Einstein Noodle]

we had to work at it ..your review certainly makes it worthwhile .. and no ..we aren't all that important in the schemes of Mother Nature :) ...Nisreen is such a free spirit eh!? thanks again for taking time KL ...
E.

[MomzillaNC]

A commentary on evolution… It really doesn’t need us to just keep right on going, does it? If anything, we’re just so much noise from self-important, squishy bags of mostly water. We keep talking about saving the planet. The planet doesn’t need us to save it. If we were suddenly gone, the planet would save itself. The truth is, we need to save ourselves by treating our only planet better.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ..our lives are so much about attitude ... the dinosaurs were wiped out ..what makes us think we may not be on the list ;) human blood is mostly saline ..in a solutuion much like the oceans' ..i think that is fascinating ...and gives me a wonderful feeling of belonging .. thanks for reading Mom! and for your review ..always appreciated
E.

[MomzillaNC]

yvw :D

[TL Boehm]

a fascinating piece, I am quite fond of whales and octopi and other deep sea creatures, not the subject matter here at the cafe unfortunately so this was a special treat.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh what a treat to see you here TL!!!! truly happy about that ... i agree ..the creatures of the sea are fascinating ... reading your review reminds me of Cannery Row .. one of my all time favorites ;) all those tidal pools ripe for collections .. love ya!
E.

[Tom]

It still amazes me that we know more about the surface of the moon, than we do about the surface of the sea and all that lives and dwells within !!

A wonderfully penned and thrilling venture beneath the vast blue yonder !

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you ... yes the oceans are another world too ;) appreciate your reding and review Tom! thanks again!
E.