a childs life

a girl get perget because she was drunk

It hurts

What you did to me

know one care

how it was unfair

 

we were drunk

from somen in your trunk

i coundnt decide

it felt so right

 

the next day

i felt far away

 somen was wrong

 

i called

you didnt anwer

your not taking responssibility

of this moster at all

 

a childs life

nothen else

i cant do this

by myself  

Author's Note

this poem is not about me i just hate guys who do this

Reviews

[Bailey C. Writing]

i coundnt decide
it felt so right
*couldn't

your not taking responssibility
of this moster at all
*you're. *monster?

Just pointing out some typos/grammar issues to help

But goodness, I love this! So emotional, very heartfelt, so sad. Good job, you're a good writer :)

[mizzunderstood12]

It's ver emotional, but you should review it and fix up the grammer mistakes and then repost it

Yes I agree with you, so emotional.

[Sweet Little Bunny]

interesting poem.

[Dragon]

Guys can really be jerks like that and i think your poem expresses how women feel like this. Cool work! :)

[HopelesslyDevoted]

very interesting

[DearSweetAgony]

I really enjoyed reading this poem.
But there are some grammar problems here.
But all in all its a great poem.
I also hate guys who do that to women and teens.
This poem is very true and very real.
Great Job!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Dark, with a inciter message, an almost undervalued taboo - well written, and excellent prose.

[Shayla Sayer]

wow love it! sad but wonderfully well thought out!

[guiltyascharged]

That's horrible. I hate when people do that. I like this piece of work, though.