a ghost kiss

she is missing her love

i feel your  arms around me

but your not there

i feel your lip on my mine

i open my eyes and i see the next person in line

i feel your hands in my hand

i look up its not yours

i have to face the truth

i need you

Reviews

[Aria]

I can totally relate to this piece. Its bittersweet. Clinging on to something that's just not there anymore. My only critique: watch your spelling. When you say. But your not there....it's supposed to be you're. Other than that...awesome =)

[BlackCl0ud]

Amazing. I can feel the hollowness of the words but at the end the determination to get what you want. ~ BlackCl0ud

[Bare trees]

Really well done. It's an empty feeling when that someone special is not there.

[Sanatombi]

A poem of longingness beautifully woven through simple words :-)

I know the feeling, very well done.

[Just a Dream]

I totally know how you feel. I can really feel the emotion in this poem.

[SheWhoWillNotBeNamed]

Let me point out the few typos. It's supposed to be "you're" instead of "your" in the 2nd line. Then in line 5 there is a repetition of 'in'. Next line should have "it's" instead of "its".

I really liked the idea and the way it was put down. Great job!!!

[Vanessa Rico]

Simple and beautiful

[☯]

This is very imaginative and also very true. It tells about what you feel but cannot have. And, what you desire, but cannot reach. Nicely written.

[guiltyascharged]

Awwww. Amazingly beautiful.