she

she

A Poem by raindroplove

she
    she thinks she the queen of hearts
I
    I am the ruler of all cards
she
    she waits to get me at the end of the day
I
    I am her pray
she
    she thinks she can beat me
I
     I already won
she
    she has her army
I
   I am all alone
she
    she will find me
I
    I am ready
she
    she thinks she has her "man" on her hips
I
    I have him on my lips
she
   she haves he evil magic

    I have my thoughts
she
     she has blonde curls
I
    I have my long brown hair
she
    she thinks of only herself
I
     I have the powers of others
she
     she has eyes to change
I
      I have eyes to kill
she
        she has her silly vocie 
I
       I have my words
she
       she will die
I
     I being her killer

© 2011 raindroplove


Author's Note

raindroplove
to you bully's on my bus

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wow i loved the whole "she
she thinks she has her "man" on her hips
I
I have him on my lips "

Posted 12 Years Ago


Great write now to put those words/thoughts into action onlyno killing it's not ethical

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is very powerful and strong. great write!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very forceful and direct . . . love it!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Great and powerful write, it's different stuff.
i love this...

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is a very creative poem. I like how you lay it out as the words dance off the screen. This is very entertaining. I love it! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Excellent poem! Keep that head of yours held high! Bullies will always be around but don't let them get you down. You get some help from a teacher, your parents, someone. Just don't let them get you down. You're better than that!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really enjoyed the way you alternated each line with "she" or "I." The layout helped the flow of the poem. Very nice opposites also. I actually thought this was between a man and a woman when I started reading this, and then I realized it was two girls when I got to "long brown hair." This is an outstanding bullying poem that stands out for its fresh style and words. In the eighth line, "pray" should be "prey."

Posted 12 Years Ago


It was creative and flowed; Ending was interesting.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Super powerful. I love the ending.

Writing keeps the dream alive
~Roxi~

Posted 12 Years Ago



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