God, I Want To Dream Again...

Your grip is never tight enough

Your words are never cruel enough

And if I try to get away

My feet are never quick enough

My dreams delay once again

I've ruined your life, you say?

You push me under the surface

How about you took life from me?

This darkened sky is my cloak

This cigarette is my new best friend

One day she will take me away

I will know where she's taking me

My mind is in another place

But here's another day with you

God, I want to dream again

When did I become so numb?

Restless, again, as I lie awake

Your whereabouts unknown

Panic begins to crawl up my spine

I never want you to come home..

Reviews

[No one]

God, I want to dream again. I know I've said that before. I've also said, "God, I never want to dream again!"

I especially enjoyed these lines: This darkend sky is my cloak (darkened)

This cigarette is my new bestfriend (best friend)

Thanks for sharing. I'll leave a few notes to take care of typos.

[Alex Minito]

lovely.

[bluessadmood]

God how lovely this is..
your grip never tight enough..words never cruel enough..yet i never try to get away..
my feet never quick enough..my dreams delay me once again..
so you say i ruined your life..so why not push me under the surface and take my life away
this darkened sky is my cloak.this cigarette is my best friend,one day she will take me away
i know where she is taking me..but today is another day with you..
ohh how wonderful ,how there is so much life in every word..
its sad but you say it so beautifully..
lovely write..

[Kelley]

I don't know who that was about but I could feel fear in it.......
Your writing is amazing Rebecca and it brings thoughts and emotions
to the surface.

Great write! Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[Tomás Ó C..]

An abusive relationship well captured...

[An owl on the moon]

The pain and anquish you display are so vivid. And your title is perfect, each line so provocative and powerful. Your writing is flawless!

[MorganLyn]

oh wow. this is very powerful and deep.
Your emotion is displayed flawlessly..
great job!

[Sarah]

Very emotional and dark (without being overly so) I loved how everything flowed together and didn't sound forced anywhere. Great job. :)

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This is good. I liked the image you painted with your words. Very good!