Hell's Abyss

... sometimes a poem is just a poem, just saying...

Hell’s Abyss

Often I want to join you

in those swirling notes of blue,

the old down low

of ebb and flow

that cascade like ebony’s glow

and from there and back,

let me “fade to black”.

but...

You always loved to tease,

to take pleasure

in darkened rooms

where demons could

coddle your heart

and take you to their lover’s shack,

while you just let me

“fade to black”.

Oh, you knew how to fight,

you always had the knack

to take my love

then stab me in the back,

sending me to the edge

of hell’s abyss

where with one push

I “fade to black”.

Aztec Warrior/redzone 8.20.16

Note: the quoted lines are from the song:

“Fade To Black” by Dire Straits. Song

is also embedded below.

Author's Note

....thanks for reading....
captcha: "bedoctor", hmmmm is there a doctor for hell and fading to black???

Reviews

[barleygirl]

As always, I love the way you take a familiar & beloved song from "our era" and then write a poetic interpretation that seems to be quite different & original from the stated inspiration. In this poem, the rhythm stands out more than usual for your writing. I love the 2nd stanza, I can almost feel the venomous vapor coming off your words. I also love the first four lines of the 3rd stanza, again, becuz I can almost feel years-long-festering of old wounds in your description! This doesn't remind me of anyone, but I think it might remind some of my ex's of ME! *smile* (((HUGS)))

[redzone]

Margie most of your reviews get to the heart of what I am writing, thank you for this... but I also learn from your words as well, see more clearly what I have written... it may seem strange, but sometimes when I write I am unsure exactly what it is I am saying, the words more or less flow out and the depth comes to me later after it's finished, a "damn I wrote that" lol... this happens usually when I am exploring things that happened in my life and the relationships I have had... songs do bring this out (no one would want to read a poem I wrote based on Carole King's "It's too Late"..) and I would even hesitate in writing one based on this...

anyway, a long reply to your review I know, when a simple thank you probably would have been good enough...

[Pryde Foltz]

Yep ... sometimes a poem is just a poem ... but I have yet to find one without meaning. Feeling a little connected to this one ... I wonder why ...lol. These things can be medicine and some times a diagnosis of what ails you and sometimes a sugar pill ... but if the spirit has been lifted ... back to being medicine. You know what pill cures the most disease ... that ole sugar pill ... placebo effect ... scientifically proven. Hey ... keep the light on for me:):):)

Now you are singing Belinda Carlisle:):)

[redzone]

sorry Pryde, no lights here, it's a kinda touchy feely place and no cure to be found... I don't think you would want to be here Pryde as too many would miss all your Taoisms and Lotus Blossom tales, as well as a white whale or two... ;0) but with that said you are welcome to join me here as long as it's the real you .. no placbos allowed... lol

[Lydia Shutter]

Those who can take what we have to give and then betray us...stab us in the back...well, they are not worth our time. Now that I am older, I feel I am a bit wiser. I have no trouble "erasing" some people from my life. It is a matter of self preservation. Dire Straits would be happy with the poem their song inspired! Very "nice" Curt. Lydi**

[redzone]

thank you Lydi... I do like Dire Straits music.. Mark Knopfler, is one of my favorite artist/musicians

[Ana Papaya]

I really like this one. Some people just have this thing... and we want it/them but we're just another shadow...

[redzone]

exactly and maybe also a shadow within the shadow... thanks Papaya, glad you liked this one...