My note

Tomorrow is not the night when I cry

Tonight's when I cross down the long bridge of sighs

And look one last time at a beautiful lie 

You didn't stop me when you said I could fly

Tomorrow I look at the sun with dark eyes

Tonight is the night when I sever all ties 

And watch all the life passing me by

You didn't stop me when you said I could fly 

Tomorrow I wade in a river of skies 

Tonight I look up from the ground when I lie

And never once did I ask myself why

Because you didn't stop me when you said I could fly

Author's Note

Okay.... so basically a couple of weeks ago I tried to kill myself. I got sent to circles of care and this is what I had written right before all that shit happened.

Reviews

[Rahul]

A great write once again, i love this, i wanted to read your book"FATE," BECAUSE i want to read this stuffs even i wanted to read one book on the same tittle "fate," and i got this here, soon i'll read that book, i've not much time to read so, ii've decided to read this poem first to give you my review....and i'll read your book tom. i love that book....i can't control myself to read that book now ...lol

anyway, nice writing, i love your theme and words as well, great write once again, you got me by this

[Rhea752]

Thx :)

[Blue Belle]

I like the back and forth between "tomorrow" and "tonight." Very good job. Take Care! Stay Strong! :)

[Anthony Q Armstrong]

This is really... whats the word? Great but with a nice creepy twist.

I know what suicide is like being as I have lost how many times I've tried. It's never the answer. "Don't do something permanently stupid because of something temporarilly wanted." If you wanna talk stuff like this out, feel free to message me and ask for my number, or just message me, I promise I'll be here to help. :p

[Tai Ryens]

I've attempted as well, and just know I understand how everything gets to you, dear friend. I know what could drive someone to the point, and I know how it haunts you.
I could feel your pain through this, and your expectation to soar in the heavens free of a body. Your last line seems that everyone has been urging you to do whatever makes you happy, and that being happy means abandoning yourself. Such is a common emotion among many writers, as many authors tend to introvert. I'd also like to admire the fact that you focus on the people urging you to be happy, rather than those pushing your life off the edge. How painful it is seems to bleed through your rather seemingly apathetic diction. The idea, kills, I know.

[♥ Kinnixk]

I know you've heard that suicide is never the answer..but it's true. I'm here if you want to talk.

I could feel your pain through this. The last line of each stanza stood out to me, like someone pushed you over the edge...
Anyway, good job :)