picture frames (senryu)

loss of love in abstract tones

teary eyes and walls;

darkened empty picture frames

that once embraced you.

 

dan © 2016

Reviews

[Insight "MH"]

You masterfully delivered all the pain of loss just in writing a few lines, that was marvelous!

[dan]

Thank you Insight. Please send me read requests for your work. That's the best way to ensure that I review your writes. I've been hospitalized recently and am way behind, but ALL read requests are eventually honored. take care...dan

[Adam W Redmon]

I like this. Nice little piece. I'll be reading more of your work soon! ^^

[dan]

Thank you Adam. Please send me read requests of your work. I've been hospitalized recently and am way behind on my reviews, but that's the only (mostly) way I get to my friends' stuff to review. take care...dan

[Ruth]

How the memories hung and adorned can bring the most visceral capture of all time when darkened...poignant Dan :)

[dan]

Poppy, Thank you for the kind words, always appreciated. take care...dan

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Damn, Dan! Brevity at it's finest...I don't know that you meant picture frame, literally, but I read it as your eyes being the frame that embraced love now weeping down the walls of their confinement...so to speak. Either way, it's emotionally intense :)

[dan]

All readers' interpretations are correct; that's the beauty of poetic form...and yours is exemplary! take care...dan

[JayceeC]

Love that is so deep that it is painful to even look at a picture... The walls have absorbed pain and now all that remains is a deep seated emptiness and the pain to follow. well done.

[dan]

As usual you have a spot on interpretation of the piece. You really seem to 'get me,' Jan. Thank you for the review. I hope things are well with Otto and yourself. Dee may have to go into the hospital, or at least do the outpatient infusion therapy for 10 days like the last time. She is coughing real bad and it sounds like when she had pneumonia. Keeping our fingers crossed. take care...dan

[Kaylee April]

I love the personification of the picture frame. Cool piece.

[dan]

Kaylee, Thanks so much. The empty frames convey a feeling of loss, a very real personal condition. take care...dan

[stargirl23]

The sense of loss is eminent in this piece..Great job

[dan]

Thank you Adi. I appreciate you taking the time to review my piece. take care...dan

[E G TEN]

Cool Senryu Dan, an eloquent write I believe, with an emotional toll in to it.
Only if those walls could speak... Very cool, Thanks EG

[dan]

EG, Thank you for your insightful review. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. take care...dan

[andrew mitchell]

you framed this one pardon the pun. excellent imagery and presentation dan.

[Nisreen]

Well
i actually feel every word

very well done

[dan]

Thank you Nisreen. A once vibrant love has left one's life and memories. The once bright love has faded to blank space. take care...dan