lost

She came out of the clouds.

Were she’s been hiding for so long.

Her life was dammed by bad things

everything went wrong.

The mistakes she made in life showed

so truly on her face. Gone old before her

time still at a sweet young age.

she knew in her heart, she needed to change.

So everything that was different. She had to learn.

 As time went by, her life got so much better.

The lines on her face ever so smoother.

The clouds back in the sky were they belong.

Reviews

[Distant horizons]

like the positivity in this. great write.

[Ursula Kay Vos]

I like the message you are relaying in this poem. The way you have used free verse to structure it so as not to "force" an unnatural rhyme works here as well. If you do ever find yourself struggling with a structure or simply want to expand your horizons with poetry forms there is a great resource on www.shadowpoetry.com under resources that lays out most forms of poetry. This is especially helpful if you are just beginning :) Many people are afraid of structure when it is actually freeing, as it give so many more avenues to write in!
This poem was well laid out in a form which is beginning to introduce you as a poet to your readers.
Welcome to WC Ms. Rosemary Keogh :)
Well done.
UKV