Memories

Ill miss them..

I wish we could've slowed down, 

Made this dance less fast, 
Now time is short, 
And the music won't last. 

The time draws near, 
When we must part, 
And I'm getting all chocked up, 
Because it was only the start. 

swaying from left to right, 
Making it up as we go along, 
Laughing in all the childish delight, 
And forgetting about the song. 

I step on your foot, 
You trod on mine, 
"To hell with this!" We say, 
Dancing is for the old and the affines 
And is over rated anyway! 

From the backdoor, 
We run out of the hall, 
While stealing all the rum, 
Laughing and shouting, 
"Let's have a ball!" 

Everyone looking at us weirdly, 
We chased through town, 
Just f****n' s**t up, 
But hey! A few bottles of rum, 
would turn the world upside down! 

Through the alley ways, 
Through the bars, 
And wineries we played, 
Singing and dancing, 
Utter bliss, 
In so many ways. 

It was getting late, 
It was almost midnight, 
And the moon was peaking out, 
From behind the mid summers clouds; 
With a smile full of delight. 

We walked over to the single tree, 
In the arbour, 
And laid beneath the rustle of the leaves, 
The stars and the full moon. 

We talk and talk, 
Sharing stories of ourselves, 
Till we slowly fall asleep, 
Under the lap of the night 
And the Lonely little elves 

I woke the next morning, 
With a headache, 
and the smell of morning dew, 
I smiled and looked to mourning, 
That you were no longer here, 
when the sky turned opaque, 
It was all so impromptu. 

what we had, 
was never a race, 
Sadly we couldn't make it slower , 
But we still savoured the last tune 

Before our song was over.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Cid]

Sounds good! Memories always make everyone emotional so, yeah, the hell yeah, so it makes you so! New age folks first off, want to stay with love but when their love goes, they start crying into the rain into their memories and that's what that makes their life sadly living and of course, ruin their every thing related to their lover's memories and that's what happens to you here because in some phrases, i've got some kinda frustration in you on your someone because your were missing much your someone when you were penning the poem. I hope everything's well now over there.

Keep up the great work!

[FateDictates]

love what you did with this, had me captivated till the end!!

[Faffy]

Thank you so much :) how did you come by this btw? Just curious :)

Have a wonderful day

Roshan

[FateDictates]

I'd be lying if I said I remembered..sorry..still love it though...

[Faffy]

its fine=) thank you again for you review =)

[Faffy]

your*********

[FateDictates]

ok am confused..elaborate?

[Faffy]

i was just curious about you came across my writing, but it doesnt matter if you cant remember =)

[AleyshaRosa]

It was so light hearted and childishly easy (in a very good way), but the end... The end was sadly, and unmistakably true...

Very well done

Koodoos

[Faffy]

thank you =D

[Kiki J]

Very romantic and heartfelt.. Nice!

Kiki J

[Faffy]

thank you! =)

[Sami Khalil]

"Till we slowly fall asleep,
Under the lap of the night
And the Lonely little elves

I woke the next morning,
With a headache,
and the smell of morning dew, "

A splendid one...:)

[Faffy]

thank you so much! =)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)................

[Faffy]

sorry it wwas so delayed, i havent been on here in a while...

[Sami Khalil]

No problem...You are welcome...:)....................

[stars are far]

That was so romantic and those nights are never forgetten and mostly what is left from them -Sadly- is only the memories .. but whats gone is gone, and we must never be stuck in yesterday because the sunsets and the sun of tomorrow will rasie with a new smile that assures us that tomorrow is much nicer than yesterday..
that was so amazing ..well done :)

[Faffy]

thank you ever so much =D

[stars are far]

you are so welcomed :)

[LadyRosaline]

sorry..I have been absent

[Faffy]

its ok dont worry about it =)

[Frieda P]

Poignant and bittersweet read, endings are always the saddest part of all, if only the dance could be endless, nice one Rouge.

[Faffy]

thank you so much =) how have you been! long time no anything! =P

[LadyRosaline]

Would you like for me to message you with my review?

[Faffy]

Yeus pleas =)

[DIVYA]

Very well writted and beautifully expressed the feelings of loss. I loved the scape of the poem and the rhyming too. Please pen on and share more such great writing with us.

[Faffy]

thank you so much =)