But Maybe

I don't want to go outside

But maybe

The sun will make me happy again

I don't want to help myself

But maybe

I deserve more than this pain

I can't stand to see your face

But maybe

Seeing you will make me stronger

I can't stand you next to me

But maybe

I'll remember why we no longer share a bed 

I won't let you tear me down

But maybe

You will be the reason I fight so hard

I still let you break my heart

But maybe

It will remind me of why I'm damaged

Reviews

[JayceeC]

This was strong except for one stanza and I'm not sure it sounds like what you meant.
I can't stand you next to me
But maybe
I'll remember why we no longer share a bed

If you are shunning a person so completely are you really likely to forget why you aren't sharing a bed?
Maybe change this to "Ill forget why we no longer share a bed." That is actually a bit more healthy point of view. forget and move on.
~Jan

[samanthaashley_]

thanks for the feedback. I guess what I was thinking was that sometimes I forget the reasons that someone has hurt me until I am physically with them. I like to live in this little fantasy world that everything was perfect, and I don't know why we don't talk anymore.. like I am missing out on something.

[RiverRei]

I felt everything while reading this. I can relate to this more than I would like to admit...It is very inspirational for those who deal with depression or loss and don't want to do things they normally would. It gives a new perspective on it that I'm sure others can relate to as well. If I still had this issue, I would definitely be inspired to go outside and move on with my life because of your wonderful poetry. Thank you for sharing it with me :)

[K. Bridgid]

I don't know if I've ever seen something as relatable as this. Every stanza can directly relate back to the recent relationship I unfortunately lost. The 5th stanza is the most significant to me. Your writing is always so relatable and makes me feel something, even if I don't know what that feeling is. Well done.

[Shawna]

I like this poem, I like the structure and flow. More than that, I like the message of strength in the midst of heart break and brokenness. At least they what I take away from it. :)

[Shekinah2015]

Sometimes life is full of maybe's. Very direct, simple, and down-to-earth poem. Thanks for sharing on WritersCafe!

[Jeyanthi]

There is always honest feeling revolves around your poem.
I enjoyed reading it..

[Rana]

Six powerful stanzas, and I could so relate to the first two. This was such a simple poem, and so inspirational, even by being about heartbreak. The way the third line in each stanza hit was awesome. Truly loved it.

[Destiny Dreamer]

WOW.. I'm speechless. It's really the thoughts which comes to our mind very often. I loved reading it!

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

very nicely written . i have no words

[Ashadan]

I like the structure and meaning of this poem. I like how each line contradicts after the line of BUT MAYBE, I don't know how or what I really feel on this poem but maybe I also feel the same thing today. Thank you for sharing. Hope to read more of your good work =)

[mayankverma]

true. A lost love is a great learning