But Maybe

But Maybe

A Poem by samanthaashley_

I don't want to go outside
But maybe
The sun will make me happy again

I don't want to help myself
But maybe
I deserve more than this pain

I can't stand to see your face
But maybe
Seeing you will make me stronger

I can't stand you next to me
But maybe
I'll remember why we no longer share a bed 

I won't let you tear me down
But maybe
You will be the reason I fight so hard

I still let you break my heart
But maybe
It will remind me of why I'm damaged

© 2015 samanthaashley_


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This was strong except for one stanza and I'm not sure it sounds like what you meant.
I can't stand you next to me
But maybe
I'll remember why we no longer share a bed

If you are shunning a person so completely are you really likely to forget why you aren't sharing a bed?
Maybe change this to "Ill forget why we no longer share a bed." That is actually a bit more healthy point of view. forget and move on.
~Jan

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

samanthaashley_

9 Years Ago

thanks for the feedback. I guess what I was thinking was that sometimes I forget the reasons that so.. read more



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What an awesome poem Samantha! Very powerful with dark tones throughout... a really enjoyable ready my friend :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is so powerful and a great poem! I can really relate to this so it hits home every time I read it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's really dark and powerful with strong emotions.I loved the way you penned it !

Posted 9 Years Ago


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"I don't want to help myself
But maybe
I deserve more than this pain"
I can relate to this poem a lot, especially the line I quoted above.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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This is a very powerful, emotional piece.

- Brittney

Posted 9 Years Ago


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