Mystery Boy
A Book by Seanh12
 Here is the The progolue for my new book called Myster boy. The main character is born in 1993 and it is about a boy who looked up too two serial killers and became the worst serial killer in London  © 2013 Seanh12
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Nice idea. Who doesn't love a serial-centric story!
In the second paragraph where you mention the family history, perhaps you could add to the mood and theme a bit more by making things either a little more mysterious or more violent. Selling knock offs just doesn't have the sinister feel I think you are going for.
Also, you might want to go over this again for basic spelling and grammar. I don't mind if you want but make sure someone does, especially because this is a set up to more.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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11 Years Ago
ok thank you for the tip.
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11 Years Ago
I am trouble with spelling and grammar.
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This is a nice idea. Just please review your grammar and spelling. For example, 31th should be 31st. I really like the Mafia thing, by the way. Keep it up.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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11 Years Ago
Thank you i like the mafia thing as well. Thanks for the tips. I am really trouble with spelling and.. read moreThank you i like the mafia thing as well. Thanks for the tips. I am really trouble with spelling and grammar. Thank you for liking it and thinking it is a good idea.
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11 Years Ago
You're welcome. ;D
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11 Years Ago
thank for reviewing it means a lot
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Interesting. :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
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interesting!!!!
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Sounds like it will be a very interesting book.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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11 Years Ago
aww thanks and it will I hope chapter 1 will be up soon gonna work on it this week hopefully if i ha.. read moreaww thanks and it will I hope chapter 1 will be up soon gonna work on it this week hopefully if i have time. Just bare with me finding it hard with college and that at the moment ok x
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I hope you take this idea and run like the wind with it. It is an awesome idea so take it and fly.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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11 Years Ago
thank you i will and glad you enjoyed it
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11 Years Ago
I cant wait till I am able to read it! :)
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11 Years Ago
ok will not be long
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11 Years Ago
I will take the idea and run with it. It will be a good story. It will have a lot of twists and turn.. read moreI will take the idea and run with it. It will be a good story. It will have a lot of twists and turns and a major twist.
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Nice idea. Who doesn't love a serial-centric story!
In the second paragraph where you mention the family history, perhaps you could add to the mood and theme a bit more by making things either a little more mysterious or more violent. Selling knock offs just doesn't have the sinister feel I think you are going for.
Also, you might want to go over this again for basic spelling and grammar. I don't mind if you want but make sure someone does, especially because this is a set up to more.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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11 Years Ago
ok thank you for the tip.
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11 Years Ago
I am trouble with spelling and grammar.
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Seanh12Ebbw Vale, United Kingdom
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I live in Cardiff, I love writing, I write horror/thriller and murder mysteries. I am currently studying Film Studies at Cardiff Atrium University . I am a geek I love comic books and graphic novels,.. more..
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