Joy of Water

Red candles lit

Yellow and white flames

Lined up in a row

Soft ripples of water 

move around 

Lights off and quite fills the room

A body submerges 

Steam rises like flames 

In hailing all around

Leaning back and closing eyes

The water moves around on the body

Making the muscles loose

Caressing with a hand on the legs

Moving up and down the body slowly

Working the water into the skin

Biting a lip 

Working fingers up her stomach 

Smiling, thinking of wonderful things

Eyes snap open 

to the sound of a baby crying......

Reviews

[Lauren Beth]

nice one!! love the surprise ending, wasn't expecting it...but as a mother of two i do know it well..lol! You have some vivid imagery here...i enjoyed it!!

[♥SunkissAngel♥]

Wow this is really good.. :)

~SK

[Misty Blue Eyes]

I'm glad everyone likes it lol

[MuSe Ampoule]

You sucked me in...all sensual and relaxing an all...then threw the cold water on. LOL! Anyone who has kids know this is a fact of life...A sad, sad fact... Can I get five minutes in here???

Great twist.

[{K}]

Ahhh.....relaxation...the day is done.......well, dang it. The child cries. I LOVE IT! My mum loves it too! :D

[Aven]

hahaha! this one really surprised me... I immersed myself in your sensual dream only to be abruptly awoken, I guess that was the point, well done. :D

[Mauricio Montoya]

nice work, well done.

[The True Angel Of Sin]

Hmm, a small piece of heaven hmm? I would have to admit, the bathroom is the one place you can usually get piece, and a bath for most takes stress away, helps you forget all that happened. To bad it usually comes back before your relaxation is over hmm?

[HopelesslyDevoted]

lol, yeah thats why i don't try to take baths. babies don't let you take baths at least not for more than a two minutes. haha!
but i love the poem, i glad you wrote about that. very pretty but also comical at the end. great job!