Bleeding Onyx~

 

my paintbrush

my soul

exposed

watercourse

epic peel

off karmic wheel

fingertips

citrus human rind

combined

mulberry spiral skin

ripping curls

torn ribbon girl

a pile of dreams in stains

left in footprint crush

rebuff

on all fours

bones on display

milky sway

smears of ink eating neon light

she fights

only herself

nature a hum

venus on a broken shell

become

becoming

succumb

eyes a void

avoid

devoid of hope

fingertips

dripping onyx

voice box

open

polyphonic

she pours the night

working it past her throat

into her mouth

shedding

a second skin

begin

again

origins of sin

amen!

center of attention

crucified adoration

numinous mutation

pinned to velvet

she vanishes

visible in onyx

rebirth

supersonic

decanted

in leather

ironic

liquid girl

wine girl

sweet

complete

dripping stain

on every hungry mouth

black out

smiling girl

taking it all with a granule of blood

painting it all with her onyx mud

lock and load

a song

hey ho

let’s go

she laughs

attacks

herself

a spot of ink

streaming

pain

pool of rain

bleeding onyx

preordained

 

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Author's Note

add on: this girl likes constructive criticism served with suggestions~ in answer to the perception of 'pretentious' below me~ the font was chosen for its similarity to ink stains and meant to enhance the poem~and not to elicit snarky comments~ thank you and have a nice day~

Reviews

[Khitii Lae-Ahn]

I Absolutely Love this...
It is...
heated marrow seeping from bone onto thin-as-eggshell fine china...pitch ink pouring from a broken pen leaking onto balmy palms of ivory hands...a bloody-stain splatter on screaming magnolia blossoms
This Is Exquisite!!!!!

[raining]

hello, yr writing too much take a break and come back it will do you much good that is what i do thanks

[C]

The words flow like a paintbrush.....or pouring ink.

[The Cute 1]

i like

[David W Moore III]

Snarky comments-ridl!
Pretentious
 Adjective:
1: making claim to or creating an appearance of (often undeserved) importance or distinction; "a pretentious country house"; "a pretentious fraud"; "a pretentious scholarly edition"
I don't think I've ever seen a poem Selene has put out tgat tries to pretend to be more than it is. All that I have read have been fantastic, tripping the light fantastic, but none of them have 'airs'. Selene, don't listen to the one or two noisemakers that want to be noticed for something other than their writing. Let them roll off your back to be trodden on the floor of mediocrity.  

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

rapid passionate painter spot on to make the insanity content
the font hmmmmmm well honestly wouldn't matter
I saw colors swooping lines to letters to words to this poem
so obviously and as always awesome job selene

[.]

thinking you may have amended the font?? Nevermind that..this is another awesome piece..your metaphor, meter, rhyme, is impeccable..you obviously have a style all your own and it shouts sensuality, intelligence, boldness..little wonder your published.. just jealous...!!

[Matthews Reggie]

this is amazing... like a dam holding creative, powerful words blown off..... the flow is unstoppable... awesome work of talent... metaphors, vocabulary... everything at its best....

[Amy Bumpas]

This poem to me reminded me of creating something...from
start to finish...sculpting clay on a wheel, feeling the texture
in ones hands, the design in the mind.

I love these lines:she pours the night
working it past her throat
into her mouth
shedding

a second skin
Sensual indeed...

[Ed Hart]

more like venus on the half-shell ... (oh, i called some old friends about the 'pretentious' guy, poor f****r)

[Hello, Goodbye]

to know your meaning and location of mind..?... the vernacular journey is splendid no doubt.. I find myself jubilant and perplexed simultaneously, which truly is an engaging feeling.. you puzzle me, and I mean that in the greatest of ways..