Intuits Interpretations

 

His how do you do was prim and proper

her shy hello came with an inward smile

that first message

 just a few sentences

a few lines of innocence

hello and good bye

glad to make your acquaintance

but something meshed

something just fit

a strange feeling

they had perhaps met before somehow

in another realm

another universe

another lifetime

they find themselves oddly drawn

unexplainably attached

(Attached  :adjective

joined, connected, bound)

by feelings unfamiliar

yet strangely familiar

same place same time

becoming a mutual aspiration

He finds himself lingering

hoping to catch a glimpse into her soul

she watches patiently

though eagerly awaiting his return

she cannot resist thoughts of his fingers

tapping ever so lightly across the  keyboard

him aroused by each carefully placed exclamation

unexpected desire

wondering what it would be like

to see the face behind the monitor

to be touched by longing fingertips

on the other side of the keypad

 the other side of their worlds

The chase, the charge

like a million volts

each electrified by this curious attraction

of someone they have never met

barricades are constructed

defense mechanisms in place

recognizing the dangers

while acknowledging

an unmistakable feeling

of heightened awareness

playfully but carefully choosing words

till metaphors dance around

 intended interpretations

and unintended sighs

  boundary lines drawn and balanced

the real story  though

in the spaces

between the lines

and the intuitus

interpretations

of words never spoken

 

© 2010 bj smith

aka shallimarRose

Author's Note

Feel free to comment/critique.. Thank you for taking time to read.. xo

Reviews

[Clara]

A very sweet write, SR.

It's a tad amusing because I've totally fallen in love with someone whom I've never met.
I've experienced that connection 'in the spaces between the lines and the intuitus interpretations of words never spoken'. Unfortunately, we never did meet.

The stanzas are exciting, romantic and familiar. Loved this. :D

[shallimarRose]

Thank you for reading Lola.. I am happy for you and have known a few couples that met online married now.. I hope all works out wonderful for you ..

My advice would be just be sure you have seen him in person and really KNOW him... I have known more then a few that have been totally taken in just to find out their Princess or Prince charming are really much older then they portrayed themselves ind in more cases then not and married.. xo shallimarRose

[Clara]

You're welcome, I enjoyed it. Thank you for your well wishes, SR. I ended up meeting a wonderful man and we're now married! He's pretty great. :)

Yes, there are so many scary stories out there. Have you watched, 'Catfish'; the movie and the MTV series? It's crazy how many people lie about their identities... xx

[shallimarRose]

No I have not seen it but I will look for it now... shallimar

[Rita L. Sev]

A "love connection" through cyberspace - though it's so hard to know if that person is being who they truly are...
A well-written tale of modern romance!

[shallimarRose]

"it's so hard to know if that person is being who they truly are.." Yes I bring that up in my poem Dawn til Dusk... I know a few that are in realife loveing relationships now but I also have had some friends (mostly male) who have been horribly hurt by online deception.. Funny you would think it was more women getting hurt but i see it with my male friends.. xo.

[Rita L. Sev]

My brother-in -law met his wife on eHarmony.com. They were both on the site for a few years, and had some interesting experiences. I am amazed that they both stayed on the site, but I suppose patience, and a willingness to wade through the potential phonies, paid off... :)

[Anna]

the real story though
in the spaces
between the lines
and the intuitus
interpretations
of words never spoken
those are my favourite lines. It ties it altogether perfectly. I love this poem a lot, almost like a modern love story. Quite similar to mine. I met my boyfriend of 3.5 years on the internet and for the first 9months we never met. but as I said, we're still together 3.5 years later.
You did a great job at capturing the events that play out in the mind and feelings that are hard to explain in that sort of situation. good job, im shelfing this one

[shallimarRose]

I am pleased you are still together.. I know several couples that met online some in totally differnt countries from one another who now are in a real life relationship and engaged, arried or in a committed live in situation... Always happy to hear when something I have put out there strikes a note with someone.. xo shallimar

[Anna]

Well luckily it turned out that we only live an hour away. And yes, it didn't strike a note with me. I wasn't expecting it though, i 've never read any sort of love story on here that originates online. I loved it

[Alia ZJ.]

Amazingly written. Soul-mates maybe? :D

[shallimarRose]

Perhaps.. I do know someone I introduced to a friend of mine online.. Now they are engaged to be married.. You just never know... Thank you for reading.. xo shallimar

[Alia ZJ.]

Haha Love-online. Technology is really pacing! xD
You're welcome! :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

First, before I forget...perhaps increase the font size a little, I had to strain to read it, especially since it was in an italicized form.

Okay, onto the piece...absolutely lovely. The idea of a chance meeting and the prescense or existence of "soul mates" is something that is quite incredible to me. You use a lot of beautiful words, and your form was also quite nice--I enjoyed the addition of the parentheticals and definition. You have a way with words, my friend, and these spoke to my heart.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Sarah... Point well taken on the font size, I will do that.. I am copy and pasting these from another site and they may view different there.. I am so glad you liked it.. shallimar

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like this almost was relationship of soul mates...

one thing though..the definition of "attached"---

i like that but it feels out of placed or forced, i think if you did that later in the poem with another word...there would be more of a symmetrical feel...

just thoughts...

it's an enjoyable piece.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Jacob... ........ In my mind eye it is supposed to feel a bit out of place here or forced....The idea that the poet wanted to push the definition or intended meaning onto the reader felt like a good one.... When I read it aloud it sounds strong... I have gotten a lot of good feedback on this piece on another site.. I do appreciate your take on it and can see your side of it also but chose to leave it as is.. Thanks again for reading anc commenting.. xo Rose

[RainDancer1997]

AWW lovely poem:)! Soul mates:)! Falling for someone you only know through the internet can be risky though. Still great job:)!

[shallimarRose]

Yes very risky... "Thank you Rainy for reading.. xo Rose

[Sam]

Hmmmm..... very interesting. I love the words.
they find themselves oddly drawn
unexplainably attached
(Attached :adjective
joined, connected, bound)
by feelings unfamiliar
yet strangely familiar
same place same time
becoming a mutual aspiration.

Soul mate perhaps? May be they were the love not meant to be.
I enjoyed the ending though:
the real story though
in the spaces
between the lines
and the intuitus
interpretations
of words never spoken.

The knowing but never hearing. Very cool. Silence can say a million words if you let it.
Thank you for the read request. Awesome read. Delightful write.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you this piece was actually written about cyber connections .. It was a challenge back in 2010 on my Myspace poetry group... Glad you enjoyed it... xo Rose

[Sam]

I always enjoy I love being draw away from this life for just a little bit when I get lost in the words you magically create the worlds and the scenes amazing. Thank you