Why Have I Fallen For You?

Why Have I Fallen For You?

A Poem by Shalini Dinesh (Poet's World)





































There are so many, yet so few,
Some who we know, and some so new,
But, why have I fallen for you?

Heart goes weak, when saying your name,
For I have changed and, I'm not the same,
Love is magical and not some silly game,
But, why have I fallen for you?

 

Even with my eyes closed I can find you in a crowd,

Hold your hands and say "I LOVE YOU" so loud,

To call you my love I really feel proud,

But, Why have I fallen for you?


I am still within the love spell you’ve cast,
My love for you is so deep and vast,
This love of mine is true and will always last,
But, why have I fallen for you?

Of all others you're precious and fully mine,
With you near me, my life will always be fine,
Our love is one, truly pure and divine,
But, why have I fallen for you?


You play with me in showers of rain,
Comfort me when in sorrow and pain,
With your help my efforts will never go in vain,
But, why have I fallen for you?

You were true, and always so good,
The whole of who is me,you've best understood,
You cared and shared all that you could,
Maybe, that’s why I have fallen for you.













6th

May 18, 2010



2nd runner up

Jun 6, 2010



Little Girls Are Made of Award

Aug 18, 2010




© 2010 Shalini Dinesh (Poet's World)


Author's Note

Shalini Dinesh (Poet's World)
The poetry was written for Zejel contest where,

The first stanza, known as the mudanza, has three lines, rhyming aaa. All the other stanzas - as many of them as you like - have 4 lines, rhyming bbba, the a rhyme harking back to the first stanza. The overall rhyming scheme for the poem is aaa/bbba/ccca/ddda etc.


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I really liked this, especially the repetition of "Why have I fallen for you"
Can I make one suggestion, just my opinion, but, if you wrote it like this 'Why have I fallen for YOU?" it makes the point even clearer, like out of all the thousands, why did I pick YOU. I donno, just what I thought.
A really great poem, the rhymes were good, and the flow was perfect.
I only had trouble with the 3rd stanza where I felt like the rhyme was really pushed. maybe re write it or tweak it a bit.
but really good write overall.
keep it up!


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like the poem but made some suggestions for one of the stanzas:

You play with me in showers of rain,
Comfort me when am in sorrow and pain,
With your help my efforts never go in vain,
But, why have I fallen for you?

Get rid of "am" above.
change "never" to "will not"

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is wonderful I like the likes stanza myself.
Awesome write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


that last stanza just earned an 'awwww' from me. :) the way you changed up that last line from a 'but' to a 'maybe' is so sweet. i really like the second to last stanza as well, that's probably my favorite part of the poem -- the 'showers of rain, sorrow and pain' bit just reads really well, and i think your feelings really come across there. i don't know much about rhyme (i never write in it), but this seemed to work, and i'd never heard of a 'zejel' rhyming scheme before... learn something new everyday. ;)

Posted 13 Years Ago


I really liked this, especially the repetition of "Why have I fallen for you"
Can I make one suggestion, just my opinion, but, if you wrote it like this 'Why have I fallen for YOU?" it makes the point even clearer, like out of all the thousands, why did I pick YOU. I donno, just what I thought.
A really great poem, the rhymes were good, and the flow was perfect.
I only had trouble with the 3rd stanza where I felt like the rhyme was really pushed. maybe re write it or tweak it a bit.
but really good write overall.
keep it up!


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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This write just made my day! It is extremely well written and its simplicity is a total delight to behold. It's got the Wow factor. I love it because it's uplifting but more than that, it asked a very sweet question and gave such a beautiful answer. Well done and the inspiration for this work, is truly blessed to have you!!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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