Inadequacy

Inadequacy

A Poem by Augustus
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Words are too frivolous for some emotions

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I've been spinning silken words
For quite a while now
A tireless spider weaving web upon web
Persevering upon the path of perceived Glory:
A prize with all the permanence of a dandelion

And I have failed
I have failed for I cannot harness sunlight to paint laughter 
Nor command the dark clouds to rain sorrow
Not if the oceans themselves flowed through my story
Could they match the eloquence of the tempest within

I have glimpsed it
the Hand that strewed galaxies around at Birth
And somewhere between the opening and closing of that fist
My tempest has carved a tribute: boundless and eternal
But my silk is inadequate.

© 2014 Augustus


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OH MY GOODNESS!!! This is STUNNING!!
You are more than adequate to spin your silken words, dear Shreyas... (sigh)

This is immaculate... you are one of my favorite writers here (The best of the BEST)..
I find your words to be an inspiration, no matter how you weave it...

Your tapestry is a colorful masterpiece, whether it is filled with dark or bright shades of emotion,
YOU have perfected the art of Poetry...your universal words resonate in my heart, thoughts which touch me deeply...

Beautiful!....into my faves~xoxo~:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Well, what can I say? I'm overwhelmed, Robbie! I can't thank you enough for your generous words. You.. read more
Robbie~xoxo~

6 Years Ago

It's my pleasure to read your work of art!... You have made "tomorrow" something to look forward to... read more



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wow so incredible...you seem to capture inadequacy perfectly and again I can relate and feel like I just fall into your words...like I am flying.
Susan

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Susan!
Susan C. Allen

6 Years Ago

You are very welcome Shreyas, I often find the smartest people are also the most spiritual and talen.. read more
There are people who can write, and, there are poets. The first, bless them, place letters without regard to the how and where; the latter respect selves, sounds, style, heart and spirit and work to create a memorial to thoughts recently arrived. You have - you have with the above.. tis beautiful, tis masterfully written. Enough said!

'.. somewhere between the opening and closing of that fist ~ My tempest has carved a tribute: boundless and eternal ~ But my silk is inadequate.' Not so.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Wow Emma! That is a great honour. Can't thank you enough!
ahh. This poem was beautiful. Such strong energy felt between words. "I've been spinning silken words" was one of my favorite stanzas I've ever read. I like this poem so much I feel because you can really feel the masculine energy behind it. It felt like love between a King and Queen. Thank you for sharing :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Wow! Thank you so much for sharing your impressions! :)
OH MY GOODNESS!!! This is STUNNING!!
You are more than adequate to spin your silken words, dear Shreyas... (sigh)

This is immaculate... you are one of my favorite writers here (The best of the BEST)..
I find your words to be an inspiration, no matter how you weave it...

Your tapestry is a colorful masterpiece, whether it is filled with dark or bright shades of emotion,
YOU have perfected the art of Poetry...your universal words resonate in my heart, thoughts which touch me deeply...

Beautiful!....into my faves~xoxo~:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Well, what can I say? I'm overwhelmed, Robbie! I can't thank you enough for your generous words. You.. read more
Robbie~xoxo~

6 Years Ago

It's my pleasure to read your work of art!... You have made "tomorrow" something to look forward to... read more
And I have failed
I have failed for I cannot harness sunlight to paint laughter
Nor command the dark clouds to rain sorrow
Not if the oceans themselves flowed through my story
Could they match the eloquence of the tempest within

Above lines are brilliant my friend...

Posted 6 Years Ago


Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you Amos!
As I read this I ponder the words of some forgotten philosopher who reminded us that we are our own worst critic. I had a conversation with a friend the other day who praised me for the service I do in helping others and all I could think about was how I always am thinking how I could be doing more. In this poem I read a man who is very humble and that is an attribute of the Lord being reflected.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you for your wise words Michael! If one has the desire to learn and improve, one must be humbl.. read more
Michael G. Smith

6 Years Ago

I have been fortunate to gain a lucrative career with only a high education but I am a student of li.. read more
This is a phenomenal piece, especially stanza two which is brilliant...awesome work :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you Steve!
In the course of our creative catharsis, we acknowledge our humble limitations to the One true Source from which a mere thought conceived universes and beyond.
Luceat lux!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you Rachelle!
A very fine viewpoint of inadequacy. What I found truly delightful was the refreshing use of language to weave images I'm overly acquainted with.

"A prize with all the permanence of a dandelion....."

"I cannot harness sunlight to paint laughter
Nor command the dark clouds to rain sorrow"

These lines are truly the children of a fine, beautiful imagination, one of the key traits to a great, timeless writer. Another awesome poem.

One small suggestion:

I've heard that the use of the ellipsis can be quite distracting to the eye, and should be used only when quoting a specific text. That being said, I think that taking away the ellipses would be nice, and yet at the same time, it wouldn't detract anything from the meaning of the poem.

As always, however, your poetry astounds me.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your generous and well considered review Gleb! You are the second person to ad.. read more
Unrequited at its best! Favourite line: I have failed for I cannot harness sunlight to paint laughter - Impeccable choice of words.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you Shezza!

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