Death Trap

Thinking in the darkness is a death trap,

and I'm it's favourite prey.

Reviews

[Ana Papaya]

The darkness is easy to get caught in if you let it ...

[Diamond]

There is a great message in this poem. My intellect suggests me that this is what all writers and poets are expected to address and drive the mankind into the Light of Wisdom. Thank you for warning me about my thought processes with your poem.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you :)

[H.L. Cerveise]

I greatly enjoyed this short poem. In the dark is often when black thoughts can pursue us. This piece flows smoothly and conveys a lot in a few words. I see only one small typo, the word "it's" should be "its." I used to make this mistake until I started always reading "it's" as "it is," if "it is" works in the phrase, then I know I am correct. Plus I try to think of "its" as "possessing something."

Well done.

[iamshadowine]

thank you :)

[Writtenments]

Short and very powerful. You do great with this style of work. Keep it up!

[iamshadowine]

thank you :D

[Chrys Marie]

It's a really short piece but it sure is enough to bring countless or various scenarios to mind! I hope you keep writing stuff like this, it's thought-provoking and lovely to read!

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much :)

[prashant]

plz don't try to think in the dark.
good idea, but i required little extra lines for a enjoyable and better ending.

[iamshadowine]

thank you :)

[Aswin R Prasad]

There's just so many ideas that these few words just brought to my mind together.
You can take this as dark poetry if you think of it as one. It's all in how you interpret it and that's what I like about these lines, It's so flexible. Love it. Keep writing more. :)

[iamshadowine]

thank you! :D

[Laurie]

From these darkly cool nuggets it looks like you'd be good at writing psychological thrillers and/ or dystopian fiction. Nice.
P.S. Just a little typo with 'it's' instead of 'its'. Unless it was intentional, then never mind.

[iamshadowine]

thank you :D

[Raylene]

Very nice dear your very talented in short yet powerful message great work

[iamshadowine]

thank you :)

[Raylene]

Anytime dear

[Sanhorsey]

Two lines, but a hell of a lot is told in it! Nice writing!

[iamshadowine]

thank you :))