Devil In Heaven

I began my journey as an angel,

Sweet and kind,

To all I behaved the same,

The only thing I wanted,

Was to shine

Shine so bright,

That the moon would carry my reflection

So high,

That I would be the attention

As I walked on my path,

I knew I’d succeed,

I knew that,

I knew I’d succeed slowly.

*STORM ARRIVES*

That was when everything changed,

A storm came between me and my path.

It was jealous,

It was cruel,

It was fate and,

It was ridiculous.

No matter how much sweet I was anymore,

No matter how much I tried to work hard,

The only thing the storm did,

Was to tear my heart apart

Slowly, I lost my brightness,

Slowly I became pale,

Gradually I lost my kindness,

And further failed

The way I entered like an angel,

Will be the same way I’ll be exiting

But the only difference would be,

I would exit like a devil from hell like heaven.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Johnny]

hhhmm reminds me of that classic book by john milton.. I believe it is called 'paradise lost' (im not sure) but it was rather intriguing!!!! 100pnts!!!!

[iamshadowine]

Thank you :)

[Pink Pastel]

Woah! Great piece love this♡♡♡

[iamshadowine]

Thank you ☺

[Pink Pastel]

Your welcome:)

[zwartenkot]

Great piece of poetry!
Loved it!

[iamshadowine]

Thank you😊

[Doux Polverenere]

your journey from good to evil is easy to relate to, i liked this " The way I entered like an angel,
Will be the same way I’ll be exiting
But the only difference would be,
I would exit like a devil from hell like heaven "

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much! :D

[Elmarie]

A great poem. I loved the concept an it was a very enjoyable read. Well done :)

El

[iamshadowine]

thank you! :D

[Ruth]

So many avenues to walk and the storm finds us all eventually, how we change is a personal journey through life...I enjoyed this :)

[iamshadowine]

Thank you!!

[Rebecca Leigh]

This poem is very relatable, a couple phrases you may want to revise but all in all, great piece

[iamshadowine]

Thank you 😊

[Bhumika Devkota]

Nice job. The plot is good and it flows smoothly. Overall, this is an good poem.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you 😊

[D]

Hehehehe. As a heavy metal junkie I had to read this one. :)

The wordplay is great, I'd be proud to call this piece my own any day.
you've gotta keep sharing :)

[iamshadowine]

Thank you very very much :D

[D]

My pleasure :)

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Love the way you have ended this piece, that is a fine game of words there. Well, sometimes things never go right with us, we must not break down, instead should try to find ways of getting those things right for ourselves. As for this poem, it is amazing and tells the sorrowful tale of a person who has his dreams shattered by the cruel things called fate and luck. Nice piece. Keep writing.

[iamshadowine]

Thank you :D