The Soldier's Song

Another attempt at a short

Mortar shells, battle-cries

Sky's aflame, jets fly, the wounded cry

Death's certain

But still I will try

My country, Motherland

For you I shall gladly die

Reviews

[Nothing Personal]

Well if it's ironic, I like it..If it's not, just well... I hate wars much like most people and sometimes I feel the concept of a nation is misleading..We are humans first, aren't we? Anyways, as a poem, a delightful shorty. The quick atmosphere building, the quick emotional turmoil and reassurance and the hint of patriotism to whiff it out..Well done Sid

[Sel Whiteley]

This is a powerful poem with the morality reinforced by the rhyme. You really capture the confusion of war filled not with multiple verbs and actions but multiple nouns including Motherland and Death which are personified, personalizing the experience of war. I don't understand such patriotism myself and have seen the destruction it causes but the poem is stunning.

[Art]

Allegiance to one's country at times seems all there is and yet the battles may continue but peace is the realistic goal...

[Lively]

nice

[Jasmine]

"death's certain but still I will try" - hopefully that's the motto that many live by.
those lines spoke fiercely. live!

a wonderful poem. it makes me want to cry.

[An owl on the moon]

Your words speak both of the horrors of war and the courage found within those who stand for the security of freedom. Each line breathes out a vibrant energy.

[Arabdha]

six lines..and yet you have managed to capture everything about the true spirit of a soldier..brilliant !

[msharma]

A great patriot feel instilled in the poem.also a message hidden about the consequences of life.

[Jesse N. Wall]

so very western front. well done, sir

[Paul Okeke]

nice and good

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

exptremely poignant and personal emotive gem~ intricate how the roots of motherland braid through our beings and lives~ I've lived in this country now for decades and yet my roots are still firmly planted in the heart across the sea~