Madness

Madness is like gravity, it keeps sinking in

Loaded with lead, it keeps pinching in

The more you duck, the more it consumes you

The more you move away, the more is it glued

 

Madness is like wind, it spreads as wildfires do

Suffused with insanity, it radiates warmth too

In a world of mediocrity, it is strangely tempting

And for a weary poet, it’s temptingly comforting

 

Madness is like love, it never loses hope

It keeps on seducing, exhorting you to elope

Societal conventions, it doesn’t give a damn

Led by its insanity, it feels no shame

 

Madness is like wine, it makes you a drunk

The senses desert, the body becomes numb

While the eyes, they take in all the details

And the mind, past this mortal world, it sails

 

So much I wish, that you would see what I see

For while you're all sane, there's still madness in me...

Reviews

[Jasmine]

There are parts of this poem that have huge potential - for example, the flow of the 3rd and 4th verses is better than the 1st two.... I think perhaps you could make some vocabulary changes in the 1st verses.

Also, of the last two lines, the final one is PERFECT, but the penultimate is clunky and reads less smoothly than some of the other lines in the poem.

I hope you're not offended. You're a very good writer. I just think this poem could be better.

[Mockingbird]

"...you've got to be an artist and a madman..." someone once said. you have to see through the mediocrity of the world as hard as it is to escape its conventions. wonderfully written poem. you're a talented artisit.

[jhumur]

the warmth in the finger tips of poet is exquisite!! madness is important,isn't it sid!!
well written buddy.. :)

[Cassie Fraga]

ooooohhh the madness of it all!!!! you penned and expressed very well here my friend can feel each emotion you imaged, and that takes talent!! this piece speaks so loud as a write will do when its written from within... and I appreciate such a piece!!! GREAT WRITE!!
**tips my lyrical wand to you**

[Robbie~xoxo~]

"Madness is like wind, it spreads as wildfires do

Suffused with insanity, it radiates warmth too

In a world of mediocrity, it is strangely tempting

And for a weary poet, it’s temptingly comforting" ~This speaks to me... The truth of "Madness"~ is that it can be comforting...

What a refreshing view you have of this...such an exquisite write!

[Robin]

the ugly madness is societal constraints that chain the imagination . the drone of negativity from "a world of mediocrity" that , personally, only fans my fires to be more .

excellence my friend .

[Moriarty]

BEAUTIFUL!!!! Amazing amazing choice of words as usual...love the way you have fused life into eccentricity...simply awesome!!!

[WhiteWillow]

I like the analogies, and your choice of vocabulary. Well written indeed

[patricia]

you paint a great picture of madness...it sounds very inviting, in fact I think I may be half way there. A good subject, penned in excellent style. Thankyou.