I Feel..

This is a poem for that one person who broke me down and walked off.

I feel so broken,

I feel so dead,

I need to be mended before I tear,

Tears and heart breaks swallowed me down,

Keeping no distance between me and my grave,

The fear is increasing,

The power is decreasing,

Nothing I have left since my courage is dead along with me.

Reviews

[raj24]

i really like these stuffs...heart breaks...i really enjoyed mine..i thought i have improved but i got it again...it breaks you..and makes you a new person... thats where i feel writing your heart out makes us believe in ourselves..i am enjoying reading your work..i hope to read more...write soon..:)

Raj

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you. There sure is more coming up. Don't worry. It'll be there by tonight or tomorrow. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

one of the horrible things we do to one another ... a terrible tragedy when someone takes advantage to break down another ... it is so sad that it happens so often .. and the abuser walks away without a conscience ... i suppose the most positive time this occurs is when the one causing the brokenness makes an honest mistake about being "in love" ... your poem creates such a clear scene and your voice is so .... well.... broken :(((((
E.

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you. I had forgotten about this poem. I wrote it when I was 15 and now I am 20. The thoughts of my 15 years old self surprise me.

[Einstein Noodle]

what a difference the years make eh!? ;)

[J.Nico]

Feeling is the opposite of death...
Feeling is LIFE!
Even when, specially when
The feeling extends beyond the senses
And becomes a perception...

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you for reading, J. :)

[J.Nico]

I liked it... it's nice when we can feel the feelings as if, in a way, they were our own.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

You express the feelings very well, nice poem!

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, Skyfall.
I like your username, by the way. XD

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome Friend!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The words are simple but the message of the poem is so powerful… heartbreak can feel like the end of the world but remember "What a catapillar calls the end God calls a butterfly"

[Simran Kewlani]

Wow. Thank you. :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are very welcome.

[vaishnavi]

it is really a nice poem
it expresses your thought very well :D keep it up

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you, Vaishnavi. You're sweet. :)

[vaishnavi]

your welcome and you are sweeter :D

[Roger Turgeon]

Sounds like a living death... fear not for you see with your mind's eye

[Simran Kewlani]

Was that a compliment or a saying? Thank you, though. (:

[Roger Turgeon]

I rarely quote...other than myself...so it was a compliment

[Simran Kewlani]

Oh! Thank you. That's really sweet of you. :)

[Sami Khalil]

"The fear is increasing,
The power is decreasing,
Nothing I have left since my courage is dead along with me."

Don't worry for Karma is real. A powerful write...:)...................

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you. (:

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)......................

[xDalliance]

Simayy! You know I love all the raw emotions in your poems. Another very good one :)

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank youu! (: xx