Midnight Saunter

On those starfilled nights i sit and ponder

Of the place over yonder

Where my heart grew much fonder

Of those lonely midnight saunters

 

We would hold hands and walk together

Unbroken even in stormy weather

Where you told me "forever"

Our hearts were light as feathers

 

Why then, did you leave?

Like water through a seive

My heart began to freeze

Our moments became only memories

 

In my nightmares  i still recall

The night they told me of your fall

Their comforts were no use at all

They couldn't bring back my beloved Paul

 

On those starfilled nights i sit and ponder

Of the place over yonder

Where my heart grew much fonder

Of those lonely midnight saunters

Reviews

[alesuriko]

This is very pretty, I love the beat and the rhythm. The rhyme is wonderful, except you were stretching it a little bit with "lips" and "kiss". The imagery is what captures me. It's so vivid and filled to the brim with emotion and all of it is expressed incredibly well through your wording. I also love the title, wonderful job!

[Moonflower]

This was beautiful and dark. It flowed beautifully. great writing, miss.

[Rana trad]

Simply Beautifull !!

[Voice]

Very deep and painful. I could feel the raw emotion given off by this piece. Just a wonderful write!!

Voice

[Ebs]

Beautifully composed. The rhyming and flow was brilliant.
Thank you for entering the "Someone Special" contest

Ebs