~Aprés Breath

Soul floating in the uncertain mist,
Inviting fading margin of death....
There... evaporates the lively zest,
Condensing clouds of my finite breath...

Piercing through the orange hue,
I am taken through and through...
Blue light blinds my unseen eyes...
My soul breaks all the morbid ties...

The fear of losing deceptive prosperity;
Stinking Hypocrisy of the sinful divinity...
Unquenchable thirst for pleasures;
Ever burning sense of rancour...

All ebbs away.....
All ebbs away.....
No retributing hell!
No heaven to dwell!!
Just......Distant tolling of bells.....
Where obscure shadows travel...

Author's Note

Inspired by Review of Elisa Laura's review on Joshua the death dealer's page. Ignited by Brain storming discussion with Mayank on this topic.. This is just a part. More is on the way... :) enjoy

Reviews

[Stephen]

Very deep. It seems you have written in this poem certian breaking away of earthly ties and then having a journey towards Heaven or Hell. But it is kind of left in limbo, like purgatory. The spiritual realm is something that we no not much about, except for what has been illustrated in God's Word and from other attempts from mindkind throughout the generations to describe something beyond the now. We will all find out for sure when it happens. But very thought provoking. I appreciate you sharing this.

[Mayank]

Whoa!! I'm singing For whom the bells tolls - Metallica. Loved the way metaphors and good to see our brainstorming penned.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you Mayank. Yea it was fruitful to argue :p.. lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This has a profundity to it Sophy. It is a well put together verse and describes the struggle with right and wrong, good and bad with a conclusion that life is for living so just get on with it. Powerful.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you so much John

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Well you go on with your bad self girl, you bring kind a of a fun appeal to the demonic, such a very awesome piece of poetry.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Aww... i love being a devil :p.. thanks Dale ;)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I bet you do, being bad can feel so good.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Ohhh yea.. it has its own merits ;p