Old together

When we were young

We held each other so tight and talked through the night

You yelled at the top of your voice

“One day we will grow old together”

Time ran on, I was always gone

As we held hands

You softly said

“One day we will grow old together”

Months and years ran off the clock, we hardly talk

With a tentative touch

You whispered

“One day we will grow old together”

Today we are old, your touch so cold

You withdraw

Not a word is said

We grew old together

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes Soren. Honest, hard and true words written.
"Today we are old, your touch so cold
You withdraw
Not a word is said
We grew old together"
The above lines, I have learn. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Soren]

Thank you Coyote for the review and most kind comments.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Alla Antsis]

much wisdom in your words....Very true! Or thou I have seeing couples with "not a word is said" with warmth and love....Words are a peculiar thing. Love your work!

[Soren]

Thank you Alla for your review of this piece and understanding of its meaning. It is deeply appreciated.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

A very strong and wise piece of poetry. Life often complicates and distracts from the most important thing that is truly worth living for. Love. We often fail to recognize this fact. Until it is much to late to live in its moment. A heartbreaking yet moving piece my friend.

[Soren]

Thank you so much dear poet. Your comments are deeply appreciated.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I enjoyed the read. Some things are meant to be. Love is hard work and responsibility. But mostly love is sacrifice and giving up that which we desire, even life. It is a most difficult thing to fathom, not being our own boss. But if anyone thinks differently I can only point them to the cross.

"Grow old along with me
The best is yet to be
When our time has come
We will be as one
God bless our love
God bless our love
Grow old along with me
Two branches of one tree
Face the setting sun
When the day is done
God bless our love
God bless our love
Spending our lives together
Man and wife together
World without end
World without end
Grow old along with me
Whatever fate decrees
We will see it through
For our love is true
God bless our love
God bless our love
God bless our love
God bless our love" John Lennon

[Soren]

Thank you so much Fabian for the review, kind words and wonderful quote.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

My pleasure. I understand your point, here. But love isn't always a physical thing. Plato said the greatest love was that which had no physical allure but a love of minds and souls, ideas and kindred spirits, I have known men I loved more than brothers but not for the sake of physical attraction. We simply shared an outlook on life. And we had friendships that lasted decades. We had our own lives and wives and kids. But we "got" each other. That's a rare thing in life. And it breeds a respect and depth of intimacy not easily dismissed. I have that sort of relationship with my wife but I'm just blessed and lucky I guess. We have a physical love as well but the other...that's the real prize.

[Soren]

So right you are.

[Ken Simm.]

So true, so rich ,so understanding. A wonderful piece from an artist I would say at the top of their talents but I suspect there is far more to go. So much empathy here.

[Soren]

Thank you so much Ken for your most generous comments, they are deeply valued

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"and the cat's in the cradle and the silver spoon, little boy blue and the man in the moon, when you coming home love, I don't know when...but we'll grow old together then---you know we will turn gray together then"
Sorry Harry Chapin....but this reminded me of that song.
nicely done.
j.

[Soren]

Thank you Jacob for the review and insightful comment. Yes as stated in Ecclesiastes "there is nothing new under the sun"

[John the Baptist]

Indeed, time is a reckless driver who gets worse with the years. The poem describes well the situation of many, who let the needs of the world exclude intimacy. The ending is tragic, all the more so because it was preventable.

[Soren]

Thank you John for the review and wise comments. Yes when looking back there are many things that could have been, should have been preventable and from such come regrets.

[willweb]

That blew me away Soren. I could feel this, the years passing, the love always there and the end, cold and desolate. I guess, just the way it is supposed to be.

[Soren]

Thanks Will for the read and kind words. No I hope that it is not supposed to be this way but in so many cases it is.

[DIVYA]

A poem with a soul and a very solid ring to it. When I read it, I wished I had written this and that usually doesn't happen even when I read poems flowing in Iambic Pentameter lol. Kudos for this one Soren! For me, this is an unforgettable poem !

[Soren]

Thank you so much divya for your most generous comments. They are truly valued. In fact divya I have tried on numerous occasions to retribute reviews but see that your site has no place for comments is this as you now wish or is there something wrong with my computer? I find chapters, of poetry. I still read them but have no way of letting you know how much I enjoy them.

[DIVYA]

You're most welcome dear Soren!
I have kept the chapters closed to reviews for now, but no worries at all. Perhaps, at a later date, I'll edit more and open the review option. Thank you so much for looking in my pages. It means so much. Stat blessed! 🙋‍♀️⚘

[carl]

this one hurts. my only resolve is don't let it be us. Well said, sad, true. thanks for the post. -carl

[Soren]

Thanks Carl for your most welcome review and kind comments.

[Chris Shaw]

Growing apart instead of growing old together. I felt the change in temperature here Soren with the passing of the years. Relationships need nurturing. Many are taken for granted. A poignant piece of poetry. The conclusion, old, cold and lonely. Very nicely composed. Thank you.

[Soren]

Thank you Chris unlike the poem, your comments are so warm and appreciated. Yes now days the majority of relationships don't last this long. Those that do it is hard to say if they last for convience or for something far greater.