Wanting To Be Wanted

Dying to be loved!

     she sits in a dark room,

     listening to the wind howl

     the rain pouring on the tin roof

     thunder ecohes through the walls

     flashes of lightening blinds her

 

     The agony she feels is suffocating her

     she hears voices in her head telling her she's useless

     loneliness over powers her,

     she can't breathe

 

     From the minute she was born....

     nobody loved her,

     nobody wanted her,

     nobody held her

 

     she grew into a young lady,

     hoping and praying, almost begging for love

     but she is still empty, alone, without

 

     she is a woman now,

     still waiting for the warmth of another person,

     still yearning to be wanted

     her whole body is screaming for affection

 

     she wants to be free,

     to love

     for someone to love her,

     to hold her

 

     The despair grows stronger everyday,

     theres no escaping the pain

     nobody wants her,

     she feels  like she's doomed to be alone

 

     So here she sits in a dark room,

     listening to the wind howl

     the rain pouring on the tin roof

     thunder echoes through the walls

     flashes of lightening blinds her

 

     And the voices telling her she is useless

 

 

   

Author's Note

Tell me if it's good, bad or just okay, or maybe excellent!!! LOL

Reviews

[Cherrie Palmer]

The pain of the lonely is all consuming pain. It is a hunger of the emaciated that will not be satisfied without another heart to share it with.

[iamcarolfierce]

This is good. I used to have this exact feeling way back in high school. I thought nobody cares, loves nor understands.

[SilentLullabies]

You did a wonderful job expressing your emotions. There are a few typos though, but not enough to be distracting.

[youngwriter222]

This is wonderful!!!!!!! I can relate so much to this poem!!
Good job letting your feelings out because many keep them in!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this EXCELLENT!!! I can relate to this one so much, i think a lot of girls feel like this on the inside and don't let it out. this is a fantastic poem!!
its inspired me to write something new actually! thanks for posting this!

[Julie Beth]

its amazing and its sad its perfect :)

[jazmin]

loved it!!!

[sarah]

This is soooo sad and touching I can relate to this poem!

[Samuel Dickens]

I find the first stanza very effective, but would change "this dark room" to "A dark room." Also, you might want to reduce the number of "she's" and "her's" That's my two cents, for what it's worth.

[SpokenWord]

I feel the pain and wanting to be loved in this one. It makes me feel that love begins on the inside of us and we first must love ourselves, love where we are in life, love everything about us and that love will attract new love outside of ourselves. If we are depressed or sad that shows even when we smile. This is a good poem.