what are you?

what are you?

A Poem by stars are far

I was standing at the hills

When I first saw your eyes

Calling mine

I thought that you are lost

I got closer from you

But I realized

That im the lost one

Who was lost in your eyes...?

But I didn’t know why

Or how that happened

But all what I knew in that moment

Is that I was waiting for you

All my life

And when I found you

I felt that im in a different world

In my world

The world that only belong to us

And when the days move

And I was lost in you

You go away and left me alone

In the same hill I met you at

And I realized then

That it was a dream and you

You were just a stranger

That I knew In my life

But in my dream that nice person

Became a monster

That is eating my meat

And when this meal is done you were gone

I just wanted to feel you

Or some love from a person

That I waited all my life

Just to know him

But now be sure im lost

And you are not more than

Pictures and memories

That I will never forgot

There is a day that will come

And when I die

You will cry for those nice memories that I gave for you

And you are going to cry 0on my tomb be sure :'(

© 2010 stars are far


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stars are far,
In this early poem "What are you?" the human essence speaks. Life is full of beginnings and endings and we dive into them with hopefulness. Our souls are the battleground and when an ending must come here is where we try to find closure. It is nice to be able to see where you were or what was being experienced in an early write. Lucky you, here it is. I write mainly about nature and love to see things like this! "You go away and left me alone on the same hill I met you on." This phrase kind of ties the whole thing together for me and then the ending "cry on my tomb for sure." A vulnerable and honest visit with a struggling to let go of something very hard to release but you did it bravely Bless you in your writing............Kathy

Posted 7 Years Ago


Beautiful poem..Keep writing, you've got a way of expressing your feelings into the words. Really beautiful writing :)


Posted 9 Years Ago


Sad yet nice poem. I like how you compared the person to a monster, eating the meat but leaving it when it was done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


First off, am surprised to see that this write's been written in 2010, sep.18th. whao! It means, you've been here for long. So, it's true that am honored to read this 2010 poem in 2014. Secondly, the poem's very emotional, may be when you'd broken up your heart with much pain, you penned this write letting your sorrow and sob go into the winds via words. In an end, i've see your sad face which I hate the most cus, I hope, you know me already that I hate watching angels feel sad. With the time everything becomes cool and the life goes as same as before...to make some changes in life, we all gotta keep ourselves busy with the time cus, I happen to know, if we are busy then we don't have time to think anything negative so, don't have enough time to sit in a corner of a room and whip out loud. Life's short, you gotta live with peacefully. Let those bad monsters or demons go into the winds who break the angels hearts. For an angel, Demons are not that worthy or much important than her life so, be cool.

Hope with the time, you've been come out from that pain.
Keep writing, you've got a way of expressing your feelings into the words.

May God Bless You!

Posted 10 Years Ago


stars are far

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much for this review..hehe
i guess thats the worst of my writings.. hehe..i was.. read more
Stephen

10 Years Ago

Haha...it's my pleasure! :) your this review makes me smile. Well...neither you were a bad writer n.. read more
stars are far

10 Years Ago

thank you so much Stephen :) i appreciate your words and your time too :)
Very sadly poetic, still the same guy I think!!! Your first write here is awesome :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Sad. Photos and memories. A line I use in my poem castles of sand. I like this piece.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Became a monster
That is eating my meat :D
you love her eyes most i think,,,,, nice writing .

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very deep and sad
Great poem :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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